I had to do a double-take that this wasn't written by headless_rainbow.

Eeeee it’s finally being published! Can’t wait to read the whole thing

Awesome work dude can't wait to see the next part.

good story but seem trolls spamming dislikes i seen this happen a lot more on good stories

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The story is explicitly gay, so it gets a massive gay tax. Not overly surprising.

In Tartarus, only the bad guys were punished, those that deserved the pain and horror a place like that could bring. On the battlefield, everyone was punished. There was no rhyme or reason to it, just that horrible things would happen to you, and, in most cases, you would never see it coming.

ooh, like that speech from M*A*S*H, love it

To my left, a Storm Guard beheaded a unicorn with a swing of its ax. To my right, an earth pony crushed the skull of an allied pegasus who had accidentally fallen into their path. Down the field, a pony so soaked in gore so as to be unidentifiable, screamed incoherently as they smashed a rock into an already dead Storm Guard’s face repeatedly.

oof that is definitely horrifying

It seemed to convey that our greatest watcher, Princess Celestia, could not even bear to witness such a sight. Such vulgar, graphic death could do nothing but bring tears to her eyes.

Worthless poetry amidst pointless slaughter.

beautiful

Flash Sentry paused a moment to inspect his appearance in a dingy storefront window close by. He looked slick in his jacket with sunglasses perched just below his maneline and shield shaped studs embedded in his right ear. He looked like a frat pony who slept around with anyone that had a working sex organ, which was exactly what he was going for.

hell yeah that is what he looks like

Feeling cheeky, he gave the onlookers a small show by walking with his tail hiked up and his flanks swaying in an exaggerated manner. Each sway of his hips gave the onlookers a peek at what lay underneath. I was more than enough to fuel any fantasies they might have if they ended up alone that night and with a need to fuilfill their sexual desires.

hoowee

It was a rather uninspired choice for an ex-military type, but Flash wasn’t there to critique his taste in drinks.

ehehe feel like this Flash would get along well with Rarity

Covering up his snort of amusement with a pattering of flirtatious giggles, Flash turned away and hiked his tail up, granting Steel a full view of his package.

ah what a world in which the default for ponies is to wear nothing

“Are you ready to get a taste of some grade A stalk?” He showed what Flash presumed was supposed to be a charming grin, but just came off as an ugly sneer.

oof unlike Flash this guy is not good at this!

“Get sucking,” Steel commanded.

well that escalated quickly

As asked, Flash shucked off his clothes, leaving them in a crumpled heap nearby. Even in the dim lighting, bright red punctures shone brightly like neon lights along his neck, and healed over scars menacingly glowed along the front of his chest.

it’s a good thing this Steel guy is not at all genre savvy. for Flash, that is

Inch after inch of cock flesh slid down his gullet until he was bobbing just past the medial ring.

dang Flash is good at this

“F-fuck, why am I… ?” Flash’s mark slurred, “I’ve never been… so sleepy…”

ahaha all that for a soporific! i gotta say this is the first time i’ve seen or even thought of it being applied this way

He had swallowed a powder that had knocked out the aforementioned pony, but, he felt, at worst, a light tingling on his teeth.

case in point! it would somehow have to affect the, uh, target more than the applier for it to work, which seems difficult biologically

It all should have bothered him, but he found all his focus was on getting back home to his Captain. A thought that caused his tail to wag behind him as he walked.

aww!

“Glad to see you too, Scales,” Flash answered, “we’ll get you fed soon, just after I get this guy prepped for the Captain.”

starting to wonder how related those two events are

“No, you should just be proud of how great I am.” Flash teasingly kissed Shining on the side of his muzzle who snorted at the statement. Flash frowned. “Are you having nightmares again?”

“Yeah, they’re…” Shining frowned as he trailed off before smiling as he opened his eyes. “It doesn’t really matter since you’re back.”

aww they hold each other together, if barely!

“No, getting the taste of that other stallion’s cock off your mouth.” Shining grinned lecherously. “We’ll need to disinfect it with my own.”

nice

“The bleach didn’t get out the colour from the last one even after I spent hours cleaning it this morning.” Flash hung his head, his ears pinned down. “Sorry, Captain.”

aww love the ear movements

“Why do they always devolve into screaming obscenities? Just once couldn’t they scream, I don’t know,” Shining waved a hoof, “drink recipes or something?”

“I think it’s fairly reasonable for a pony to swear when you pull out one of their teeth with a set of pliers.”

A roar of agreement came from the crate.

ahaha love how jaded they have become to this

Flash glanced meaningfully at the pink six pointed star sewn into Shining’s lab coat before refocusing on keeping Steel’s foreleg pinned to the gurney.

ooh what could this mean??

After some hemming and hawing, Shining said, “eh, probably. Honestly, Spike probably isn’t going to care either way.” He whistled. “Come on, buddy, time for dinner.”

oh ho ho i did not catch that that was supposed to be Spike! truly a Dark and Twisted AU you are brewing up here >:)

Before Shining could reply, the moment was ruined by the unfortunate timing of the rope around Steel’s muzzle coming undone. “Let me go, you monsters!” he screamed, throat raspy from overuse.

“He’s really ruining the moment,” Shining growled angrily.

“Yes, but it’s our fault for not finishing the job,” Flash said with a bright smile, “come on, let’s get this guy cut up and sent off to… huh, I didn’t actually ask where we’re sending him this time.”

honestly just love how this juxtaposes such fluffy slice of life with everything else that is happening. an amazing intro! really does feel like a pilot for a really cool TV series