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I had to do a double-take that this wasn't written by headless_rainbow.
Eeeee it’s finally being published! Can’t wait to read the whole thing
Awesome work dude can't wait to see the next part.
good story but seem trolls spamming dislikes i seen this happen a lot more on good stories
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The story is explicitly gay, so it gets a massive gay tax. Not overly surprising.
Velvet, sweetie?
If Shiny were half the monster you think he is, let alone that he thinks he is, Night Light wouldn't need a divorce.
And not a jury in the land could convict him for it.
Grief is understandable. Anger is understandable as a part of it.
But last I checked, "sadism" wasn't part of the grieving process.
She should maybe consider that of her three children, the one who isn't dead or verging on insane is the one she had the least involvement in raising.
Wait this is actually pretty good why does it have so many dislikes?
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Probably people that just look at the tags and vote without actually reading, thinking it's just some gorefest bs story.
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Combination of what Toiwat noted, plus the fact the story is rather explicitly gay between the cover art and descriptions, so it doesn't really stealth as well as other stories with LGBT themes.
It's fine, though. This story is extremely self indulgent in terms of themes and what I'm writing. It was mostly written for the interest of like five people, and the fact that there are seemingly a bunch people that really enjoy it is nice to see.
bittersweet. an excellent piece of work! i loved it :)
ooh, like that speech from M*A*S*H, love it
oof that is definitely horrifying
beautiful
hell yeah that is what he looks like
hoowee
ehehe feel like this Flash would get along well with Rarity
ah what a world in which the default for ponies is to wear nothing
oof unlike Flash this guy is not good at this!
well that escalated quickly
it’s a good thing this Steel guy is not at all genre savvy. for Flash, that is
dang Flash is good at this
ahaha all that for a soporific! i gotta say this is the first time i’ve seen or even thought of it being applied this way
case in point! it would somehow have to affect the, uh, target more than the applier for it to work, which seems difficult biologically
aww!
starting to wonder how related those two events are
aww they hold each other together, if barely!
nice
aww love the ear movements
ahaha love how jaded they have become to this
ooh what could this mean??
oh ho ho i did not catch that that was supposed to be Spike! truly a Dark and Twisted AU you are brewing up here >:)
honestly just love how this juxtaposes such fluffy slice of life with everything else that is happening. an amazing intro! really does feel like a pilot for a really cool TV series
a feat definitely worthy of Luna’s mythical status, love it
so true! this is something of Luna’s character that a lot of stories make nods to but few really follow through on thematically
again, the juxtaposition!
oof, definitely a bad direction this whole enterprise could head in
oof, reflecting the last lines of the flashback portion of this chapter about only thinking of the present
wonderful comedic beat
and augh, Flash is definitely seeing something bad brewing within Shining. he is very right to be worried
aww what did Garble do to deserve this?
ok it feels like there’s an entire story behind this guard guy!
ooh what is the story there i wonder!
love the sinister vibes here. guessing there’s far more going on here than them simply being exes
the very horse-y snorting adds a great touch to this moment of drama, love it
ooh that definitely adds a certain air to the backstory of this world. honestly just love how you’re sketching out this AU
love how they’re all on the same page here, and how much this Luna and this Shining Armor overlap
they overlap a lot!
thus is the irony of Luna, love it!
aww im glad Flash is in this
love Luna’s self-awareness here, and the parallels between Shining Armor and Celestia
she is so perfectly emo i love her
also love how there’s not like a cooler of ice or any kind of specialized storage, just a fleshy mass inside a bag lol
love how Shining goes far enough with this little touch after all this rotting flesh and spilling bile
aww, so heartwarming!
that is indeed amazing random chance. also love that this was the “he” that the pair were so worried about encountering!
that is, uh, well,
hoowee that ain’t good
Flash’s incredulity at the guards not having checked the box beforehand is more than understandable because oof
and oof, a horrifying mental image in a story that has been full of them. and at last that scene i saw on Discord so very long ago has its proper context!
love that after all that they’ve been through and done together, dinner at the Sparkle household is causing them so much angst
ooh, amazing imagery! i hope that i remember this subconsciously to unknowingly use later because it is so good
Night Light really is living up to his characterization here!
well that is something!
the combination of Twilight Velvet feeling all the way she is and still cooking and serving a family meal really is quite something. an over-the-top level of sustained tension that i feel i have seen before in your works, it really works to make characters memorable
ahaha the pettiness! it just feels like it’s straight from good television, love it
i mean i can see this being a pretty good deal! nothing wrong with that!
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Night Light really doing his utmost to do normal dad things around all this
aww the pony version of deathsticks i presume?
wonder what this trailing off is hiding!
augh love this. you do characterization so well
this is not doing any wonders for Flash’s abandonment anxiety let me tell ya
aww love it!
ok maybe i’m dumb but what i’m getting out of this is that the coworker gave Night Light the sticks after Night Light talked about Flash and Spike, to ward them off or destroy them, due to the assumption of anti-magical construct prejudice? i feel like i’m missing something really good and subtle here
and augh, love this. like Night Light, i am very glad Flash is there for Shining. and i have to say even among the character work you’ve done that i’ve praised so much, this chapter might be some of the best i’ve seen. just sublime
augh, heartbreaking! what a final moment for Spike that would have been
badass, love it! and this is from someone who’s reaction to Spike being mentioned is “who’s Spike?”
given what we’ve seen of the trio’s activities so far, that is an interesting standard that Luna adheres to
ahaha that makes all too much sense, augh. (though wait doesn’t he eat gems? does he need both?)
oh yeah that would def get to him
that is… certainly some sort of logic for who to blame for what happened…
oof, Spike the extremely desensitized child soldier
coming from a guy that didn’t kill any ponies when burning a town?
love this, very cinematic
ahaha love it
again another amazing character-driven chapter. really love the depth that you bring out in this Spike. all he needed was a few years of unimaginably horrific trauma and loss and murder to really burnish a shine on his canon issues of being a dragon raised by ponies!
love that this is a dark reconstruction of Spike being used as a flamethrower in the canon movie scene, haha
yes, not an ideal time to begin a relationship, but given everything going on at the time, it’s quite understandable the question of whether or not it’s a good time for one wouldn’t really factor in
love this connection in the story between the awful splatter gore of one context and the lifesaving medical intervention of the other. which itself is the same duality that is had by the necromancy magic that brought Spike back to life! dang you are good
oh that explains the lights in the family dinner chapter! also, love the use of a classroom setting to get some good, meaty diegetic worldbuilding in
hoowee, where will this go from here! and of course the chapter opening with Shining Armor decapitating the Storm King really informs the atmosphere here, love it
that is definitely what the Luna as depicted in this story would say here, love it
those words from Luna at the end are sure to come back later
that was quick!
extremely understandable looks
that does sound about right
this motivation made sense in the context of the canon movie, but in this grimdark world it sure does feel very, very silly!
huh, for some reason i never sat down to wonder just where that petrification technology came from and just why we never saw it again. this makes a lot of sense! stealing it
aww, that is so heartwarming! i am so glad Flash and Spike are there for Shining Armor, they are such a wonderful family together
oh boy. surely Tempest can’t think that Shining would give her a better end than Luna will? and augh, yeah. i was happy before but thinking back there was no way this arc would ever end so cleanly for Shining, was there
Spike def still has his sarcasm centers intact through all this
hoowee
noooooo not the foreshadowing!
oof! honestly i was into their dynamic so much this caught me by surprise
i was wondering how you’d stick the landing here but you definitely have! and the broken clock stopping at the end, ugh, just cinematic and beautiful
in a word, masterful. like, wow. i could not imagine how good this flashback chapter could be, and i can’t imagine now how it could be any better. how it builds on the reveals of the previous chapters, retroactively explains so much about their dynamic, and expresses the true heart of that dynamic, that beautiful devotion that Flash has for Shining Armor…
somehow, in this very gory and messed up AU, you have written the definitive Flash x Shining Armor story. it is one of the best ships i have seen in all my years of reading ponyfic, and i’m not even past this section yet but i know this story will stay with me for a long time, because again, this flashback, wow. it is a crime this story is not read and loved by more people.
love this classification
hell yeah! love Flash’s guitar! and augh i wish i could characterize using the environment like this
love that this mirrors, somehow, Cadence abandoning the war
and augh, that high tension used so well here
yay! (and augh there is a good deal more story to go! just what have you planned here…)
and honestly it feels really fitting somehow as a real first date for them! it somehow has to be a place where it’s normal to eat something greasy enough to give you a heart attack
dangit i wish i could eat fried food now! i love fried food… i really am Flash Sentry in this one…
nice
ahaha that is adorbs
so true that is definitely a thing in Equestria because Equestria is a nice place, even this one where all the horrible things happened :)
gottem
aww yay!
oh hell yeah!
auaugh i love this
and oof, that long list preceding this, Flash’s resignation to and acceptance of it anyway, augh…
and Shining asking for this, knowing he would imagine it, knowing he would know that it is the right thing to do and that he would have happiness… augh, the pathos. i love it so much
and a perfect way to end it.
i’m not sure what else i can add here right now. just that this really is one of the best stories i have read on this site. i think i have a new favorite story from you, Otter. thank you so much for this wonderful and amazing work