Interesting story so far. So far one question came up in my head. Why does the overmare risk the life of two scientists? I‘ve understood that Appletree probably doesn’t need protection, but Stardust only accompanys her because she’s shy and her sister?
Was the research Stardust was doing not important or is Appletree so shy that she didn’t have anyone else who could go with her?
11146211 As the translator of this story I´m very glad for that feedback. Thank you. I was not sure about the way of spelling these words. I was looking up in the internet. But thanks to your hints I can improve my work in the next chapters^^
Interesting story so far.
So far one question came up in my head.
Why does the overmare risk the life of two scientists? I‘ve understood that Appletree probably doesn’t need protection, but Stardust only accompanys her because she’s shy and her sister?
Was the research Stardust was doing not important or is Appletree so shy that she didn’t have anyone else who could go with her?
Otherwise a very promising start!
Not a bad start. Slightly hard to read in some areas but that is likely due to the translation.
When talking about Stables as in the FoE rendition of Fallout's Vaults they should be spelt with a capital letter at the beginning as they are names.
Littlepip is one word and PipBuck, or you could put it as Pip-Buck.
But anyway, this was a good start, keep it up.
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As the translator of this story I´m very glad for that feedback. Thank you.
I was not sure about the way of spelling these words. I was looking up in the internet. But thanks to your hints I can improve my work in the next chapters^^
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No problem, happy to help