Making up for Wintersolider's Spikes Time with the Pie Sisters?
Well done

Very nice, love it.

I'd suggest getting an editor to look at this, some parts make me pause for a moment and reread the sentence to understand what I just read.

Apart from that, I'm intrigued.

Filled with missing words and grammatical errors

Bad pie pun.

maldigo ni falta de entendimiento de ingles, casi no logro entender las referencias... aparte de eso la historia no esta mal...
I curse my lack of understanding of English, I can hardly understand the references... apart from that the story is not bad...