Twilight Sparkle thought that she was ready to move forward to the next stage of her life. She thought she was prepared for any threat that might stand in her way. She hadn't anticipated the threat that would come from within.
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Ah epic. Lovecraftian horror. Man made horrors beyond our comprehension epic
What surprises me is that Twilight doesn't immediately cast a nullification spell or a reversal spell once she regains her mental faculties in the real world. She doesn't even attempt any scientific research or investigation into the corruption spell beyond what can immediately be observed with the naked eye.
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Twilight has already observed that attempts to reverse the transformation have failed, which becomes further solidified when Discord reveals that even he can't do anything about it. Being able to undo the mental effects of the transformation was lucky enough.
The story as a whole is burdened by what I would describe as a forced sense of urgency; Twilight is panicking to gather up all her friends and loved ones to make sense of the situation, and then suddenly she has to rush to deal with a new threat. If there's anything I'd change about this story on a rewrite, broadly speaking, it'd be to not have everything start so fucked, give more time for things to build. Only have two or three of the main cast transform right away, attempt to actually show more of the transformations in progress, give the characters more time to process things (like letting Twilight put more research into the corruption), and actually expand upon the baggage they have beforehand instead of dumping it all on the reader halfway through the story. Unfortunately, the Celestia/Luna ticking time bomb was already set up by Tinged, so I couldn't really easily ignore what was happening in Canterlot.