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You rather want Soarin to be punched/kicked/shoot in the dick, than to forgive him?
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This is a good chapter after so long. Plus. It's good to see Spike back in action
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Yeah I'd like to see him go for all of that and then I would forgive him
ROFL he will not be feeling his legs tomorrow
Every anti-hero has an origin story. And fight crime in brutal extremely ways tell the world watch out I'm serious.
need more, give more
I'm sorry, no offense, but the story is now meaningless
Nice to see this story back, i honestly cant tell the difference between old and new formats, its not you its me.
Given this whole theme of "heroes" being gods i highly suspect some more "monstrous" characters to be involved, as in Hulks, Swamp Things, Etrigans and like.
Great story so far, can't wait for more. Great writing technique
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The problem was that Spike is "too much over power", in the three previous stories don't say how Spike decided to start killing the villains, this decision was too easy. You said, 'but this chapter has', but it doesn't, an example when the rarity was almost kidnapped by the Hero of human traffic was arrested and that's it, the one that should make this hero be transferred to another region (there are people protecting him) or at least suspended Hero's license temporarily investigation (which may say they found nothing and believed in the version that he was manipulated), seeing that the system is unfair, or villains get away with hero mistakes or being released from prison (bribery or a task) system does not recover, some villains lose fear of Heroes and kills general and Heroes are punished unfairly, one of his friends suffered at the villain's hand and is disabled to never be a hero again, would be many of the causes for Spike starts to change, see the whole system broken. This is what most lacked consequences of the acts, Spike solves everything easily (he leaves over power too much) there is nothing that changes his mind and I don't see him killing villains, continuing to be a hero who believes he is an example.
Celestia and Discord's relationship believes that Heroes have to be examples for other people, in the context of Discord he gets angry at Dr.Hope (Dr.Death) because someone close to him even thinks he participated in personal events of the royal family. He saw that this put his family in danger. hopefully this is a consequence of what he said that he weighs a lot in the world and talks to Celestia about that.
I would have an Alista and Discord background.
Something else in the world should have three types of guardians:
Heroes - Help others with their own lives and set an example.
Hunters - Like vigilantes, but licensed to fight crime, but kill villains as a last resort (Dragonlands has many Hunters), always have conflicts with heroes.
Shadow - would be dark heroes organization that kills villains without restrictions, works in darkness are illegal (Spike resolves proves that the person he killed showing their crimes they committed).
I said that you have to think about building the world, what is this world and what is in it.
Now for the girls that I found a 'speedrun' to solve something quickly, Spike's identity being very easy, with digital I would be careful Spike not to identify it too quickly to be different, the 'Pinkie Sense' would be plausible giving her some familiar, but it is in conflict with others that it does not believe in very much.
About Spike's friends also seeing and suffering the consequences.
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Yeah, me and Mlpengineer are working on it, as for how Spike stated killing villains will be explained in a later chapter.
Spike’s identity won't be revealed so easily, you'll see... expect to Pinkie... the "sense" of familiarity they felt was her Pinkie sense... it'll make more sense in the next chapter
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Yeah, used later chapters, not really advised to lose much impact, to be a small and little displayed.
So Spike avoids it in the previous chapter, in the next he finds out about someone when he presented us with some feelings, others confuse these feelings linked to being an assistant to the 6 main ones
Alright, it seemed to be a misunderstanding between him the girls. Also, emerald fire for the win should he use the element in his fighting style.
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hey engineer here, want to ask if you could explain in a little more detail, might help me propose an idea, I'm good with thinking
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I'm organizing some things here I'll already talk about it.
" When men blindly follow the truth remember nothing is true" "When men are bound by morality or law remember everything is permitted" "We work in the dark to sever the light we ARE ASSASSINS!!!!!!!"