A wintery tale told by a magic snow-pony about the events that almost ended Hearth's Warming that takes a not so unexpected turn when Princess Luna faces the Candy Mare in a last ditch battle to save Equestria!
There it is! Beautiful! I was hoping there was something big you were building towards, a meaning to why they're doing what they're doing and what it means metaphorically. What a poetic and terrible idea! I loved the imagery here. I loved the way the interior just became more and more horrific, and the final reveal and then the speech! Don't think I didn't catch the references! There's lots of wonderful references in this story.
There's a few homophone mistakes here and in earlier chapters, maybe only you're/your (see "your both in control") and a missing period during a moment of battle ("at close range") but obviously nothing that ruins the atmosphere you've built.
You've done something wonderful here, by using well-known show history as your setting: we're doubley intrigued how this is going to end. There's two naive possibilities: 1) We can either suspect the past will somehow continue into the present as it should (maybe come full circle to the first story as it's being hinted at?) or 2) go off on its own tangent and become an Alt Universe fic. Considering this series is very comfortable with alternate dimensions, timelines and universes, really anything could happen! So far reading, I hope it's either the first or some unobvious third option. Not because it'd be less satisfying but because you're a creative and clever enough writer I know you could make something truly poetic!
There it is! Beautiful! I was hoping there was something big you were building towards, a meaning to why they're doing what they're doing and what it means metaphorically. What a poetic and terrible idea! I loved the imagery here. I loved the way the interior just became more and more horrific, and the final reveal and then the speech! Don't think I didn't catch the references! There's lots of wonderful references in this story.
There's a few homophone mistakes here and in earlier chapters, maybe only you're/your (see "your both in control") and a missing period during a moment of battle ("at close range") but obviously nothing that ruins the atmosphere you've built.
You've done something wonderful here, by using well-known show history as your setting: we're doubley intrigued how this is going to end. There's two naive possibilities: 1) We can either suspect the past will somehow continue into the present as it should (maybe come full circle to the first story as it's being hinted at?) or 2) go off on its own tangent and become an Alt Universe fic. Considering this series is very comfortable with alternate dimensions, timelines and universes, really anything could happen! So far reading, I hope it's either the first or some unobvious third option. Not because it'd be less satisfying but because you're a creative and clever enough writer I know you could make something truly poetic!