This second chapter is good.
The only thing I might point out is that it's probably more realistic to have taken Flutters to the hospital. But the way everyone takes care of her is spot on.

Also there's a bunch of things that are clearly typos. "He" instead of "The", etc. I'm sure if you read through it, you'd see most of them.

But this was good. Took it to a whole other level that is showing the effects of (and hopefully recovery from) a most brutal experience.

Oh yeah, and it gets a like from me

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Just went through and fixed, thank you! :)