The Things It Does To You

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n3k1dsk1llz

n3k1dsk1llz #1 · Aug 29th, 2021 · 1 · · What It Makes Good Stallions Do ·

Brutal.

I knew what I was getting into. You made it clear as day in your description.

It still hit me like a dodgeball to the face.

Rubakor

Rubakor #2 · Aug 29th, 2021 · 1 · 7 · What It Makes Good Stallions Do ·

Eh, barely feels like rape, not quite brutal enough.

Infamous Paradox

Infamous Paradox #3 · Aug 29th, 2021 · 1 · · What It Makes Good Stallions Do ·

I am interested in the aftermath chapter.
The pacing seems a bit rush especially for Mr. Shy since the rut should have slowly affected a bit more slowly in which could have added a bit more writing and some character changes when he was slowly being afflicted by the rut. He should have also had begun to release his own pheromones which would have some effects on Fluttershy and to add, Mr. Shy, should have also known what the smell of heat is since he is a married stallion, but it was most likely affected because FS heat was concentrated inside the cottage.

PLAYBRONY

PLAYBRONY #4 · Aug 30th, 2021 · 1 · · What It Makes Good Stallions Do ·

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Thank you for the comment! I definitely wanted to make this longer but have been struggling a little with fluff content lately haha, so I decided Id rather publish it than let it gather dust like several others I'm working on haha.

I'll definitely work on a second chapter

(And just fyi I am a ma'am rather than a sir haha)

n3k1dsk1llz

n3k1dsk1llz #5 · Sep 25th, 2021 · 1 · · The Things it Leaves Behind ·

This second chapter is good.
The only thing I might point out is that it's probably more realistic to have taken Flutters to the hospital. But the way everyone takes care of her is spot on.

Also there's a bunch of things that are clearly typos. "He" instead of "The", etc. I'm sure if you read through it, you'd see most of them.

But this was good. Took it to a whole other level that is showing the effects of (and hopefully recovery from) a most brutal experience.

Oh yeah, and it gets a like from me

sykko

sykko #6 · Feb 13th, 2022 · 5 · · The Things It Makes You Feel ·

I can't wait to see Mr Shy strung up by his own wings and slowly have his balls and dick cut off with an intentionally dulled, rusty spoon, then have said spoon used to rip out his guts.

PLAYBRONY