I am interested in the aftermath chapter. The pacing seems a bit rush especially for Mr. Shy since the rut should have slowly affected a bit more slowly in which could have added a bit more writing and some character changes when he was slowly being afflicted by the rut. He should have also had begun to release his own pheromones which would have some effects on Fluttershy and to add, Mr. Shy, should have also known what the smell of heat is since he is a married stallion, but it was most likely affected because FS heat was concentrated inside the cottage.
10956501 Thank you for the comment! I definitely wanted to make this longer but have been struggling a little with fluff content lately haha, so I decided Id rather publish it than let it gather dust like several others I'm working on haha.
I'll definitely work on a second chapter
(And just fyi I am a ma'am rather than a sir haha)
Brutal.
I knew what I was getting into. You made it clear as day in your description.
It still hit me like a dodgeball to the face.
Eh, barely feels like rape, not quite brutal enough.
I am interested in the aftermath chapter.
The pacing seems a bit rush especially for Mr. Shy since the rut should have slowly affected a bit more slowly in which could have added a bit more writing and some character changes when he was slowly being afflicted by the rut. He should have also had begun to release his own pheromones which would have some effects on Fluttershy and to add, Mr. Shy, should have also known what the smell of heat is since he is a married stallion, but it was most likely affected because FS heat was concentrated inside the cottage.
10956501
Thank you for the comment! I definitely wanted to make this longer but have been struggling a little with fluff content lately haha, so I decided Id rather publish it than let it gather dust like several others I'm working on haha.
I'll definitely work on a second chapter
(And just fyi I am a ma'am rather than a sir haha)
I'm concerned
But then again...
I'm intrigued...
I DON'T KNOWWW- I WANT TO KICK HER DAD TO THE MOON