A girl by the name of Sarah let an old man into her home, in exchange for her kindness he gave her a yellow raincoat that would change her life forever.
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You know, I think I figured out what is wrong (from my point of view) with your story. The story is fine, the problem is this is not it. This is a draft of that story. It feels like reading a conspectus. The bones of the story are here, they might be misaligned a bit and a few might be missing, but in general they are fine. There's skin, it covers the bones and none on inside are sticking outside. However, there's no meat and we can only guess placement of internal organs.
I don't dislike it. I just think one day when you'll get more experience with writing you'll decide to rewrite it.
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This is the reason I will never become a professional writer, once I start getting bogged down by trying to fix all those issues I start hating it and stop writing tossing the idea into the garbage. I just let what I want come out of my head.
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Eh, just keep writing and one day you'll look at your old chapters and won't be able to stop yourself. XD
It's hard to keep practicing something and not improve at it at all.
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I don't feel like I'm any better than the day I first started, I feel like I'm worse.
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No, you just learned from the experience and noticed issues which you ignored before. That's a common issue of knowledge. The more you know the more you know you don't know. Just don't lose confidence in yourself.
Well, there goes Chrysalis.
I don't really like her so honestly I'm fine with her death.