Hum... I think that we have a problem here with walls of text... Try to give a paragraph at least after two different characters speaks. I not a pro, but with so many text together it's hard to read without becoming tired. The story is still good, but this chapter is bigger than the last two, and the walls of text here became a problem. Try to make it easier for us to read.
Hum... I think that we have a problem here with walls of text...
Try to give a paragraph at least after two different characters speaks. I not a pro, but with so many text together it's hard to read without becoming tired. The story is still good, but this chapter is bigger than the last two, and the walls of text here became a problem. Try to make it easier for us to read.