Okay so I normally don't read incomplete stories, but I saw you were new here, so here goes nothing.
The concept of farm colt in school can be an interesting story, and I don't really know for certain where you're taking this.
However, this first chapter is in dire needs of an editor. There's a lo of "show don't tell" in here where you tell us what the character is thinking or doing, when you could illustrate it better through visuals, and body ques, and that takes time to learn. Celestia knows I'm still learning

Secondly, you need to describe more a lot of this is dialogue heavy, and while that can be done well you're putting a lot of pressure into that being the key here, when it should be a mix of both to be a solid story.

Lastly, your characterization needs work, right now this colt who is the one I'm suppose to care about is coming out as the "misfit" no pony understand and then suddenly makes a friend? What?

Lastly, as I said before the concept itself could be rather well done, if you're willing to dedicate the time to it, and look into the resources available on the site. I'm a reviewer and admin of Reviewer's mansion, so I have learnt a lot from my time on the site, and I'll follow you because I want to see where you'll go from here. As always. Keep up the good work.

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I appreciate the advise and I'll keep all that in mind, thanks.