Emily opened her eyes slowly, giving a huge yawn.
Man, these hospital beds kill my back a little more each night.
Fully opening her eyes, the 17 year old froze. The forest. She was in the forest. Shaking her head, Emily tried to blink away the woods in front of her. When the forest stayed instead of fading into her white hospital room, she knew she was in deep trouble. When breathing became harder, she knew she was screwed.
Emily stumbled to her feet, grasping at her constricting chest.
No, please. Not here, not now.
Wheezing, the girl stumbled to the edge of the woods and towards the small cottage in a large field. She needed help, and she needed it now.
Fluttershy watched as the unconscious creature began to breath easier. Whatever had happened had ended when the animal collapsed. Flutershy stood up and circled the animal. She wanted to bring it inside and get it confortable, but there was no way she would be able to carry it. The small pegasus galloped inside and quickly came back with a blanket. She covered the bipedal animal and sat down next to it.
"Oh, I hope Twilight gets here quickly"
The shy pony didn't have to wait long. Twilight came running across the field with a saddle bag full of books. The hawk Fluttershy had sent was gliding above her.
"Fluttershy! What happened? Are you-"
Twilight stopped mid sentence at the sight of the alien creature. Her eyes widened in bewilderment.
"I-Is that a human?"
Fluttershy flicked back an ear in confusion.
"A what?"
Twilight shook herself.
"Never mind that, let's get her inside."
Twilight Sparkle, Rainbow Dash, Fluttershy, Applejack, Pinkie Pie, and Rarity all sat around the asleep human. The human was asleep on a bed in Fluttershy's spare bedroom. Rainbow Dash flapped her wings as she hovered over it. She reached down a cyan hoof to poke it, but it was slapped away by Applejack.
"Dash, don' go pokin' it. It's tryin ta sleep!"
Rainbow Dash frowned but back peddled away from the human.
"I just wanted to see if it would wake up. Jeesh!"
Rarity frowned.
"Rainbow Dash, dear. From what Fluttershy was saying, this poor creature is not well."
Rarity's eyes traveled over the animals clothing
"It's sense of fashion is quite ill as well."
Pinkie Pie was bouncing around in excitement.
"Oh, I've never met a human before. Twilight what's a human? OH! It's so sad! She's the only human here and she know nopony. I have to throw her a 'Welcome to Ponyville' party. And a 'Get Well Soon' Party! I hope she wakes up soon! She has no friends yet so I hope when she wakes up we can all become friends. Oh this is so exciting! What kind of food should be at the parties? What do humans eat? I bet she loves cupcakes! This-"
Pinkie Pie was cut off by Twilight sticking a hoof in her mouth.
"Pinkie Pie, please be quite. The last hing we need right now is-"
Applejack interrupted her.
"Look! She's wakin' up!"
Intresting.... I like where this story's going.
Short but interesting.
interesting.. some minor errors (feat instead of feet and you missed the t in that.. both in the first chapter).. tracking for now
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um. . . like a illness in the. . . mind?
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The description says metal, not mental.
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Sorry. It did say metal, not mental. Thank you for pointing that out!
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The show in general, or that specific scene?
I really like where this is going!
If you need a prereader or anything drop me a PM.
Also ive always wondered how the mane 6 / ponies in general would deal with this exact situation, so bravo for reading my mind!
.....Seriously guys am i the only one with continued interest in this?
A word of wisdom, these chapters are kind of short. Maybe, instead of two separate chapters, each with ~500 words, you could have one chapter with ~1000 words, which would be these two chapters split by a horizontal rule.
A very nice story. I cannot wait to read more!
I think it should say:
Interesting so far.
Combine the two sentences. You need to work on your flow, and read each chapter aloud before you publish.