I take it Sunset will be dealt with right?!

as a luna fan i love the cover art

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With prejudice!

Interesting start, I am interested in the idea in the description. Can't wait till I can read a completed story. I tend to read completed stories only because of good ones getting cancelled. I'll definitely be checking back in though.

So, who is the Human Main Character?! Hope that he is a Dominant Type, and Master.

Completely killed my interested with futa garbage.

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Mayyyybe =3

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What do you mean "maybe"? Because, I'm NOT into having a Male Main Character into a Doormat/Submissive Type, a Simp to a TERRIBLE Mare/Women, etc..

I prefer Strong Dominant/"Master" Guys that takes care of their Harem/Women. And doesn't abuse them or anything.

By the way, when do we see Sunset herself gets punished??!! Because considering what I have just read?! Either she will get the usual Death Sentence, Life in the Dungeon with NO Parole.

BUT, I'm guessing that she will be the Number One of THE LOW CLASS Position as a Slave ever in Equestria's History. It will be a "Ultimate Punishment". And I doubt that Celestia, or any pony will give this "waste of air" ( Sunset) mercy, after what she have did to Poor Luna.

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Alright, well, I tried to be coy. Agree to all points, still working out the details.

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Source in the description! (NSFW version under same artist's name owo)

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Eh I hope Luna is the mistress personally. Mistress of the night and all :P

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It would be very cool for Luna that when she is fully recovers from her Physical/Mental State. I hope that she will be the Mistress to Sunset as Total Revenge/Pay Back!!!!

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It's fine.

And I meant a Simp, NOT simple from the last comment.

The sheer power of love overflowing from it has caused the residents of the new Empire of Canterlot to become gods and goddesses in their own right, and a golden age of prosperity sees Equestria become ever more eager to share the glory and love with others. However, there cannot be all sunshine and happiness, a month prior, Princess Luna went missing, with only a mysterious and mocking ransom note. It was discovered that she had been taken to the lair of the power-mad Sunset Shimmer, who sought even greater power by stealing aspects and even body parts of her alicorn nature. Knowing that she would have limited time to experiment on Luna before being discovered, Sunset Shimmer created a temporal anomaly that stretched days into months, and Luna came out of it changed forever...


To be honest Ik in the first movie Sunset was fairly 'bad' in the sense that she was a bully but to this extreme seems leagues out of character for her. Ill see how the fic goes so far though.

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Sounds literally the exact same as the females you dislike but the genders are swapped comrade, Dom Humans in these stories are done to death it would do to have some variety, porn fics usually have never heard of 'Switches' Either lol

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What's that supposed to mean? I'm not Sexist!

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Not saying you are but it just kinda seems odd to me.

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What odd about it? Because, what you said earlier sounds like I'm some sort a Hypocrite and a little Sexist against Females being Dominant ALL the time. Which I'm not really.

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I guess in a way It was hypocritcal since instead of females being doms you just want human men to which is a bit stale in boring in my opn.

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I don't think it's stale and boring. Because Irony, I SEEN a LOT of Stories in here that has the Females ( Specifically the Pony Mares) being Dominant and all. With little to No Maledom so far I have read.

So how is it Hypocritical of me? When I seen MANY Femdom in many Sex Stories that I have seen in here?! So, technically this is a Stalemate?

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I do intend to try to create an interesting and compelling motivation for her. A twisting of love, good intentions, and an amplification of her own canon desire for power and glory. I hope you find it interesting.

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There's like, 5 femdom human mare fics I've seen and like infinite human Male dom harems , not incl like any nasty foe fic.

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I hope I will too comrade :)

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Despite Physically and Mentality TORTURING Luna. I doubt that she has "good intentions". And Celestia will especially won't feel the same way either, and will just HEAVILY Punish her with Death, Imprisonment, or even as a Eternal Slave to her as Pay Back for her Sister.

What picture did you choose for Luna?

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The cover art of the story?

Mind you that's the SFW version.

Anyway I'm about 1/3 done with Chapter 1 so you'll see how it differs as well. Call that picture one from later down the line.

You'll know what I mean.

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Oh, sorry, I should have been more specific.

The depiction of Luna in the cover looks slightly different than the picture I chose, with a more blank and distant expression and stunted (not removed) horn and wings, but this is as close as I could find without picking from Fall of Equestria depictions.

This paragraph in your description. What did you mean?

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An entirely conceptual picture that I might commission at one point or another... or perhaps someone will become inspired enough to draw it.

Starting in chapter 1, we will see what this version of Luna is like, hence the alterations to her appearance I mentioned.

From that point on, it depends on how people receive the next chapter.

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Ahhh, I gotcha. Thanks.

i just took a look, not bad! so Soarin kinda turned the tables about who is master and slave, eh?

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He is Spitfire's champion Stud, as stated in my Thunderlane story too.

He gets what he wants, which is mostly sex, but also a loving home and challenges to overcome, and he serves Spitfire by caring for and pleasuring his squad and her, as well as serving as a soldier and entertainer.

He controls his squad, and Spitfire controls him. But she loves him too. Even if he can get ornery sometimes.

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Of course. Was just, the way he started to please her when going into the mood, makes it look like he is the dominant one, you know?

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Its a cute dynamic when you view it that way.

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yeah