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excellent story my friend, it would be nice if they had
a small series of them going on an equestrian tour.
Misty showing Zaq the wonders of the kingdom and Zaq doing a
report on possible tourist places for humans.
without neglecting the seasoning parts of course

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i would really like to make chapters like that, but for the purpose of this story, i'm just focusing on the relationship and hardship that Misty & Zaq go through before i get to the final chapter.

More please 👍👍👍

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don't worry i got the next chapter already written.

It’s cute so far. A little too early (in my opinion) to think otherwise. Just a few corrections, like here:

After the pair’s most recent meeting, and talking with Twilight at dinner, the pair made their way to their room and when the door closed, Misty proposed something that’s she’s be wanting to try out. And that something is what lead up to her getting eaten out.

Where you could have used “they” and maybe “room. When”. Hopefully I’m not nitpicking here cause I know I missed some earlier and this was closer to the end of the story. It just seems like it’s running on too much and throws me off on reading a good story .

But it’s still good and would really like to read more of this (and their) story .

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i'll take any tips i can get. i like to improve my writing to give people a good read. i know i should have an editor, but i like to do the editing myself. that's how i usually improve.

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Hey, no problem. I like to see authors get better at their writing . I just hate seeing comments “bashing” authors cause they read too much into it and start saying stuff that’s not really there . I like it if it’s helping the author in small ways like this .

Again, your welcome and hopefully you get a chance to do a few more chapters to help you with your writing of this and future stories .