11358092 im sorry i took so long to post. most of the chapter was written back around when i released the previous one. i only was driven to write the last 400 or so words to finish it very recently. i made a blog post apologizing and explaining a bit more about my situation
11358143 i appreciate the compliment. and, addressing your previous comment, part of me wants to make the excuse that its an adventure comedy.
but the real reason why im so memey and stuff is cuz thats how bad my humor is, at least part of the time. the car was part of that humor. i cant truly promise i wont try to tone it down, but i also still know how to, usually. ill try my best though. just kinda typing what feels right, when i get the inspiration
11358145 Adventure comedy is fine, my issue is more when the memes break the physics rules. You've set this up as a pretty grounded story it feels like with a magic system based on intent and a reasonable upper limit (getting winded time locking 2 bodies). So to conjure a car feels like a much harder thing than time locking a body. But maybe I have all this wrong and you are playing more fast and lose with the physics in order to tell a more comedic story.
Tbh, part of me doesn't want to post this for fear that it might put you off writing more. But I'll stick around to see where you task this. The magic system is really secondary to my interest in the politicking and government. Whatever you do don't rework your already posted chapters. It can kill motivation. Just write new stuff and learn from the past.
11358174 nah, for one, i think the magic stuff is a valid criticism that i hadnt thought of, so now i will in the future, so i appreciate you bringing it up. second, im too lazy/uninspired to rework old chapters. it already took me this long just to write 4 chapters. how long d'you think itll take to rewrite stuff i only barely remember and/or think about now that its passed?
to be clear, i like comments like this, as oftentimes they point out flaws in my unintentionally hole-filled lore/logic
Hmm... a new name... do you have one in mind? I would go with one that pays homage to the whole 'Emerge from the Old Chrysalis' thing. Seems fitting, in my opinion. I'm looking forward to what you come up with (hopefully without such a long wait in between again).
11359035 in regards to her name, im trying to find something fitting, and itll definitely follow a theme, but the challenge feels like i dont want to choose a name thats objectively... intense, so to speak
as i was writing last night, i thought i found something alright, but coming back to that name, its... not got the right feel to it
11359100 Perhaps browse through some taxonomy of insects that go through metamorphosis like butterflies or moths, there are some that sound appropriately changeling-y.
11452792 i'd love to truthfully say ive got something coming soon, but i cannot. ive had a hard time getting the drive to even attempt overcoming my writing block. this story is actually the closest thing ive done to a fully self-made idea, which i struggle with. im much better at imitating/recreating other things that already exist.
but i definitely appreciate all the support ive gotten for this chaotic little trainwreck i've created.
just for the support you gave me, though... ill try to add a little to the next chapter. its the least i can try to do.
11453227 Nice! Also take as much time as you need I would rather have something amazing like what I’ve read so far than something rushed. Even if you don’t come out with anything it was awesome to read this!
oh hey, it's back, niiice.
11358092
im sorry i took so long to post. most of the chapter was written back around when i released the previous one. i only was driven to write the last 400 or so words to finish it very recently. i made a blog post apologizing and explaining a bit more about my situation
Great story so far. And good editing.
11358143
i appreciate the compliment. and, addressing your previous comment, part of me wants to make the excuse that its an adventure comedy.
but the real reason why im so memey and stuff is cuz thats how bad my humor is, at least part of the time. the car was part of that humor. i cant truly promise i wont try to tone it down, but i also still know how to, usually. ill try my best though. just kinda typing what feels right, when i get the inspiration
11358145
Adventure comedy is fine, my issue is more when the memes break the physics rules. You've set this up as a pretty grounded story it feels like with a magic system based on intent and a reasonable upper limit (getting winded time locking 2 bodies). So to conjure a car feels like a much harder thing than time locking a body. But maybe I have all this wrong and you are playing more fast and lose with the physics in order to tell a more comedic story.
Tbh, part of me doesn't want to post this for fear that it might put you off writing more. But I'll stick around to see where you task this. The magic system is really secondary to my interest in the politicking and government.
Whatever you do don't rework your already posted chapters. It can kill motivation. Just write new stuff and learn from the past.
11358174
nah, for one, i think the magic stuff is a valid criticism that i hadnt thought of, so now i will in the future, so i appreciate you bringing it up. second, im too lazy/uninspired to rework old chapters. it already took me this long just to write 4 chapters. how long d'you think itll take to rewrite stuff i only barely remember and/or think about now that its passed?
to be clear, i like comments like this, as oftentimes they point out flaws in my unintentionally hole-filled lore/logic
I'm still enjoying this story
Hmm... a new name... do you have one in mind? I would go with one that pays homage to the whole 'Emerge from the Old Chrysalis' thing. Seems fitting, in my opinion. I'm looking forward to what you come up with (hopefully without such a long wait in between again).
11359035
in regards to her name, im trying to find something fitting, and itll definitely follow a theme, but the challenge feels like i dont want to choose a name thats objectively... intense, so to speak
as i was writing last night, i thought i found something alright, but coming back to that name, its... not got the right feel to it
11359100
Perhaps browse through some taxonomy of insects that go through metamorphosis like butterflies or moths, there are some that sound appropriately changeling-y.
Thanks for the update!
I have no idea why this didn’t show that it was updated in my notifications.
Update when? This is an amazing story and I can’t wait to see more!
11452792
i'd love to truthfully say ive got something coming soon, but i cannot. ive had a hard time getting the drive to even attempt overcoming my writing block. this story is actually the closest thing ive done to a fully self-made idea, which i struggle with. im much better at imitating/recreating other things that already exist.
but i definitely appreciate all the support ive gotten for this chaotic little trainwreck i've created.
just for the support you gave me, though... ill try to add a little to the next chapter. its the least i can try to do.
11453227
Nice! Also take as much time as you need I would rather have something amazing like what I’ve read so far than something rushed. Even if you don’t come out with anything it was awesome to read this!