Holiday blushed and said, "Hippogriffs' naughty bits might be shaped like ponies' naughty bits, but they're twice our size or more."

This had me hurting so much just from the potential sympathy pains. Lol Not very many stories can do that. Thank you.

A light-yellow hippogriff mare landed and picked Scootaloo up, spinning her even faster than Skystar had. "Scootalooooooo! Scootaloo! Scootaloo!"

Skystar should be changed to Silverstream. Bc Silverstream was the one who picked Scootaloo up before and Skystar who has just picked up Scootaloo. At least according to this quote:

"Skystar! I'm gonna throw up, I'm getting dizzy!"

Holiday grinned. "We were nineteen and horny, once, too, ya know."

Okay, that alone justify the high score from the contest 👍

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Yay! Thanks.

"I can smell the puddle in your chair from here," said Sweetie Belle.

Well this took me off guard