I skimmed this chapter when I saw it was all humans (or something) and all dialogue and no character I know or care about. That’s tough to start as an opening for this reader. If you’re open to criticism, all of this could be better introduced more naturally in the story so the reader won’t be inundated with exposition and to make ya care for who they are.
I skimmed this chapter when I saw it was all humans (or something) and all dialogue and no character I know or care about. That’s tough to start as an opening for this reader.
If you’re open to criticism, all of this could be better introduced more naturally in the story so the reader won’t be inundated with exposition and to make ya care for who they are.
Uh..
Chapter 0?