This is really interesting. My first thought was that this could’ve easily been prose, and maybe I would’ve liked it more that way, but the whimsy rhymes and chipper tone actually lend a lot of character to the narration. It really makes me picture the kelpie as an adorable little nugget, even if she does snack on ponies now and then, and I love it. And it sorta scratches that evil fish horse itch i’ve... had forever and basically never done anything about.

You are doing good work by writing fish horses snacking on notfish horses, is what I’m saying.

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it ain’t much, but it’s honest work. 👉👉