11634083 mhmmmm... I would have to say, that I am really enjoying the lack of understanding and complete wonder that Spike is experiencing with the new environment. The first few chapters do a good job explaining where Spike is in terms of the beginning of the story, what he does for a living and what kind of relationship he has with his boss and coworkers during and after work. We don't get to see how our main dragon fully got to where he is, but we get enough details here and there to get an idea. The interactions before the party feel more fluid because we are looking at characters whom 'in terms of your story' would have known each other and interacted with each other for a good amount of time. I like how were not experiencing the beginning of the story, but instead are witnessing the transition from one aspect of the character's life into a new one. 'Private Party' is the invite, 'King's Court' is the peak behind the curtain before the main show and 'Initial Impressions' is the opening act. We are the audience and so is Spike, we have an idea how things work and where they could go, however we are unsure of what we would or should do. The way that Spike interacts with the new things around him feels very much like how I 'personally' would find myself in placed in his position, confused, ignorant, and in awe. If I had to point to a few things that I enjoyed outside of Spike's interactions via physical and spoken, than perhaps I would have to say that I like the demonstration of the first party game as well as the part with 'the twins'. I was waiting for the part where Spike would attempt a round of the game in question, cause up to that point there was a lot of teasing, however, thinking over the chapter more, I don't think the way he's currently written would volunteer right away. Not everyone is a social princess and thinking more about it, I don't think Spike is either. He likes attention, but he doesn't like being the spot light. In that I can relate. I'm also enjoying how your letting the chapters/scenes take it slow enough to be fleshed out. It really paints a picture of what's going on and is pretty easy to keep track of what's going on. In short, keep doing what your doing.
Must truly thank the timing of this chapter, had a 6 hour drive and had my phone read it for majority of the trip.
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Welcome.
Anything you liked in particular?
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mhmmmm... I would have to say, that I am really enjoying the lack of understanding and complete wonder that Spike is experiencing with the new environment. The first few chapters do a good job explaining where Spike is in terms of the beginning of the story, what he does for a living and what kind of relationship he has with his boss and coworkers during and after work. We don't get to see how our main dragon fully got to where he is, but we get enough details here and there to get an idea. The interactions before the party feel more fluid because we are looking at characters whom 'in terms of your story' would have known each other and interacted with each other for a good amount of time. I like how were not experiencing the beginning of the story, but instead are witnessing the transition from one aspect of the character's life into a new one. 'Private Party' is the invite, 'King's Court' is the peak behind the curtain before the main show and 'Initial Impressions' is the opening act. We are the audience and so is Spike, we have an idea how things work and where they could go, however we are unsure of what we would or should do. The way that Spike interacts with the new things around him feels very much like how I 'personally' would find myself in placed in his position, confused, ignorant, and in awe. If I had to point to a few things that I enjoyed outside of Spike's interactions via physical and spoken, than perhaps I would have to say that I like the demonstration of the first party game as well as the part with 'the twins'. I was waiting for the part where Spike would attempt a round of the game in question, cause up to that point there was a lot of teasing, however, thinking over the chapter more, I don't think the way he's currently written would volunteer right away. Not everyone is a social princess and thinking more about it, I don't think Spike is either. He likes attention, but he doesn't like being the spot light. In that I can relate. I'm also enjoying how your letting the chapters/scenes take it slow enough to be fleshed out. It really paints a picture of what's going on and is pretty easy to keep track of what's going on. In short, keep doing what your doing.
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Insightful to know I seem to be getting things right as that's the general idea I'm putting down.
Your engagement is appreciated.
I'm glad this story is getting updates, it really is fantastically written. Very well done!