Great work can’t wait for the next chapter

interesting

"AJ, what are you.....oooooh that feels goooood~" She moaned.

Ten minutes later, the sore ache was gone from her hooves.

"Wow Applejack, thank you!" She said, amazed that her friend did that for her.

'Wait a minute, can I...'

"Aj." Rainbow Dash said. Applejack shot up and stood at a ready position, ready to do anything.

An ellipsis is three dots, not four, not two, and five is right out.

A twiddle is not punctuation for informal writing. If you want to convey something is said in a particular way, describe it.

Generally, saidisms like moaned, groaned, hissed, and whined are really bad, as they convey wordless vocalizations and not actual words. If someone moans, try to describe how they're moaning.

sore ache is a tautology.

When using dialogue tagging with said, you should not capitalize the start of the tag—it is a continuance of the dialogue's sentence.

When a sentence is cut off sharply (particularly by someone else talking), use an em dash —. Ellipses are used for a slow trailing off of speech.

When said tagging, the quoted content must finish with anything but a period.

Never include two actors in the same paragraph (except for very advanced situations involving first person).

Keep going!

Also em dash = alt + 0151. Good to remember.

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I'm sorry, I just copypasted what you said into my "how to grammar" folder for future reference. Good stuff.

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nice work.

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Who disliked this XD I found this useful and liked it myself!

9802284 Maybe someone didn't like my Monty Python joke? I dunno. Keep up the writing though!

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Actually, I think I once read that a four-dot ellipsis was technically correct as well.

Rainbow Dash was sitting on a stool, rocking it back and forth as she was hooked up to a machine similar to when Twilight was trying to figure out Pinkie Pie's "Pinkie Sense".

God damn that brings me back, holy shit.

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Oh you're reading my other stories! I REALLY Suggest Thank You, Mistress!