Centuries ago an ancient relic of great power, was thrown into another world. Now that relic has resurfaced and chosen its newest bearer, who will use its power to change his life forever.
Ha ha ha! I didn't look at the tags immediately, so when I was reading the description of the story, I was expecting it to be some kind of action adventure where he uses the Mentis Stone to save Equestria. It was really funny when I looked under the spoiler warnings for the chapters and seeing what I did.
I saw the first two comments about Flesh Sundries non-conning a girl, so I probably won't read this, but I had to stop by and let you know what a laugh you gave me. Have a like regardless.
Well i almost want to call out a dick move by flash here but considering the kinda story this is it's fitting. So I guess I was sorta right for the next girl.
Quick tip: writing conventions commonly suggest putting a comma before the name when characters address one another. That helps avoid misunderstandings. Take this example:
Ok, i had to stop after chapter2 cuz im legit torn on what to do. I would like to continue reading this as im interested to see how this plays out but after looking through the spoiler tags and getting a feel for the story im not sure anymore. Not because its bad far from it, i think the sex scenes are freaking amazing the problem is... everything else. Yes i know there were plenty of warning signs for people like me but hey, i was curious. So let me just ask this, is this gonna have a positive or negative ending? not asking for spoilers or anything like that! just a small heads up before i go deeper into the rabbit hole. And since i dont want to ruin the fun for others a PM would be nice.
Now, as for additional notes. I do think Flash Sentry would do well not to enslave all the girls just for himself. He already has a hard time keeping up with the ones he has right now. Enslaving some and giving them to also-brainwashed friends as gifts would be a way to go about it. Like, if the CMC start investigating, they might be a tad too young for him, so why not give them to some of the younger guys? Like Wiz Kid, Snips and Snails. For that matter, what happened to Spike? Not saying Spike should be given a girl, dog Spike is frankly not interested in humans, but it's weird how he's not around. Well, whatever, I could see Flash enjoying seeing some more girls enslaved to other guys, and he himself could enslave the principals to subvert the entire school in the long run.
In fact, since he's got Sci-Twi and Sunset Shimmer both in his personal stable, he has two super-smart scientists/magic experts who could work to widen the stone's influence from direct application to some area of effect. Especially with Sunset's Empathy power, perhaps coupled with shards from the Dazzlings' gems. Maybe it'll be slower to take effect or allow for only minor alterations, but that would make it so easy to cover up what he's doing. Let the girls' families think everything is alright... and perhaps make them kinky too in the process. Watch Shining Armor lead Dean Cadance around on a leash, Twilight Velvet lying over Night Light's lap... Lots of fun to watch. Have them make movies for later enjoyment too.
Ha ha ha! I didn't look at the tags immediately, so when I was reading the description of the story, I was expecting it to be some kind of action adventure where he uses the Mentis Stone to save Equestria. It was really funny when I looked under the spoiler warnings for the chapters and seeing what I did.
I saw the first two comments about Flesh Sundries non-conning a girl, so I probably won't read this, but I had to stop by and let you know what a laugh you gave me. Have a like regardless.
Well i almost want to call out a dick move by flash here but considering the kinda story this is it's fitting. So I guess I was sorta right for the next girl.
Quick tip: writing conventions commonly suggest putting a comma before the name when characters address one another. That helps avoid misunderstandings. Take this example:
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Ok, i had to stop after chapter2 cuz im legit torn on what to do. I would like to continue reading this as im interested to see how this plays out but after looking through the spoiler tags and getting a feel for the story im not sure anymore.
Not because its bad far from it, i think the sex scenes are freaking amazing the problem is... everything else. Yes i know there were plenty of warning signs for people like me but hey, i was curious. So let me just ask this, is this gonna have a positive or negative ending? not asking for spoilers or anything like that! just a small heads up before i go deeper into the rabbit hole. And since i dont want to ruin the fun for others a PM would be nice.
Now, as for additional notes. I do think Flash Sentry would do well not to enslave all the girls just for himself. He already has a hard time keeping up with the ones he has right now. Enslaving some and giving them to also-brainwashed friends as gifts would be a way to go about it. Like, if the CMC start investigating, they might be a tad too young for him, so why not give them to some of the younger guys? Like Wiz Kid, Snips and Snails. For that matter, what happened to Spike? Not saying Spike should be given a girl, dog Spike is frankly not interested in humans, but it's weird how he's not around. Well, whatever, I could see Flash enjoying seeing some more girls enslaved to other guys, and he himself could enslave the principals to subvert the entire school in the long run.
In fact, since he's got Sci-Twi and Sunset Shimmer both in his personal stable, he has two super-smart scientists/magic experts who could work to widen the stone's influence from direct application to some area of effect. Especially with Sunset's Empathy power, perhaps coupled with shards from the Dazzlings' gems. Maybe it'll be slower to take effect or allow for only minor alterations, but that would make it so easy to cover up what he's doing. Let the girls' families think everything is alright... and perhaps make them kinky too in the process. Watch Shining Armor lead Dean Cadance around on a leash, Twilight Velvet lying over Night Light's lap... Lots of fun to watch. Have them make movies for later enjoyment too.