9680932 It could also use longer chapters because in chapter 2 scoots and applebloom don't even react to her spider form or her immense size which makes the size change irrelevant.
9680950 Scootaloo's reason for not reacting to much will be explained in a future story as for Apple Bloom she's not the type to freak out but if you read closely she was uneasy about it, she reactedmore strongly to Rarity because they were attacked by changelings.
9680956 The fact that she didn't react to sweetie belle eating changelings is another thing. Not to mention that sweetie herself is acting like nothing is wrong, no freak outs no what are my friends gonna think or I'm I gonna have to leave equestria.
9680956 I'm sorry if I'm sounding like I'm trying to be mean I'm just pointing out plot points that probably should be addressed like how sweetie belle has such fine web control despite just finding out she's a spider.
Sweetie
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Thank for the comment, I didn't even notice. Fixed it now.
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Welcome
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Are you enjoying the story so far?
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It's okay
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I wanted to try something different and the thought of having a spider like species hunting Changelings made sense.
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Its not that (love that actually since I have my own species that hunt them) it's the exicusion you need a editor
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It could also use longer chapters because in chapter 2 scoots and applebloom don't even react to her spider form or her immense size which makes the size change irrelevant.
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Scootaloo's reason for not reacting to much will be explained in a future story as for Apple Bloom she's not the type to freak out but if you read closely she was uneasy about it, she reactedmore strongly to Rarity because they were attacked by changelings.
9680956
The fact that she didn't react to sweetie belle eating changelings is another thing. Not to mention that sweetie herself is acting like nothing is wrong, no freak outs no what are my friends gonna think or I'm I gonna have to leave equestria.
9680956
I'm sorry if I'm sounding like I'm trying to be mean I'm just pointing out plot points that probably should be addressed like how sweetie belle has such fine web control despite just finding out she's a spider.
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Sweetie Belle is having faith in her friends as for Scootaloo anymore would be spoilers. Apple Bloom's part may need some work though.
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The whole thing could use some work in all honesty as it is super rushed