Paragraphs need to be no more than 6 sentences. There was not single pony in this chapter. It's generally helpful to keep a single pony or mention of ponies in a chapter.

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Hello HumanSVD,

And I can't take any credit for writing this Chapter; it was written by "An Iowa-Class Battleship" before he decided to leave me hanging, and abandon FIMFiction entirely. I did some tweaking to the Chapter, but for the most part, I just decided to let it stand on its own merits, as a testament to Iowa's work, as the Prologue, and Chapters 1-2 of this story are now the only pieces of his work left on FIMFiction since he deleted all of his other stories, and his account. So if you wish to lodge a complaint about the 6 sentence paragraph, I'm not sure where you should lodge that, as I don't know how to contact Iowa anymore

And as for the Pony in every Chapter bit, I can agree with that in some instances, but sometimes you need a Chapter or 2 to be Pony-free, so as to set up something big. That's what this Chapter was meant to be, and it'll be the only Chapter not to mention anything Pony-Related too, as Chapter 2 mentions Equestria, and the crew of "4-8-8-4" going there again, multiple times, leading up to its very special ending

the start of this chapter (maybe the rest i havent read the whole thing, im writing this now so i dont forget) is just:
https://www.youtube.com/watch?v=X791IzOwt3Q

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Hello Ninja_Master6545,

And this song is very fitting for the chapter's beginning