A Displaced inspired story of a human in Equestria with elements from the anime series; Naruto, and Avatar: The Last Airbender, and the video game series; The Elder Scrolls Series
I agree, try spacing out whats happening with some backstory, or at least try to do some dialogue between The Apples and Brush, but this isn't bad there is a bunch of potential and I'd like to see more. Have a like and a favorite.
9674015 Thank you for the advice, it was my first attempt at writing a fight scene, and I'll start pacing myself and fleshing out the fight scenes. Thanks for the comment!!!
9703810 Earth and Water bending, and as for jutsu he can use I can't list all of them in this one comment but I'll list a few of them; Earth Release: Double Suicide Decapitation Technique, Earth Release: Earth and Stone Dragon, Shadow Clone Jutsu Earth/Water/Lightning Clone Jutsu, Water Release: Water Dragon Bullet Technique, Water Release: Water Beast Technique, Wind Release: Divine Wind Technique, Wind Release: Great Breakthrough, Lightning Release: Electromagnetic Murder Technique, and Lightning Release: False Darkness Technique.
9704799 Well he certainly looks human, but that isn't all that he is ;). His adopted family is Khajiit and they know what his origins are but, he doesn't like others knowing because they judge him harshly on the actions of the past of his birth family.
9722404 I've got about three fifths of the chapter done, I've just got to work out a few more scenes and work on an ending and do some editing before I post it. Hopefully I'll have it up and posted by Friday, but I hope to have it up sooner.
He is a awesome fighter,I'm happy pear butter and Bright Mac are alive and ok. I guess in this AJ and Big Mac know there Mother is a pear. Can they have a few pear trees.
you are going to fast on the righting
I agree, try spacing out whats happening with some backstory, or at least try to do some dialogue between The Apples and Brush, but this isn't bad there is a bunch of potential and I'd like to see more. Have a like and a favorite.
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Thanks for the advice, I'll try to flesh out the dialogue and beef up the fight descriptions. Thanks for the like and fav!!!!!
9674015
Thank you for the advice, it was my first attempt at writing a fight scene, and I'll start pacing myself and fleshing out the fight scenes. Thanks for the comment!!!
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your welcome
Can't wait for the next chapter 2 come out
Question what bending will he be able to do and what jutsus is he able to do?
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Earth and Water bending, and as for jutsu he can use I can't list all of them in this one comment but I'll list a few of them; Earth Release: Double Suicide Decapitation Technique, Earth Release: Earth and Stone Dragon, Shadow Clone Jutsu Earth/Water/Lightning Clone Jutsu, Water Release: Water Dragon Bullet Technique, Water Release: Water Beast Technique, Wind Release: Divine Wind Technique, Wind Release: Great Breakthrough, Lightning Release: Electromagnetic Murder Technique, and Lightning Release: False Darkness Technique.
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So hes human? which species of human?
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Well he certainly looks human, but that isn't all that he is ;). His adopted family is Khajiit and they know what his origins are but, he doesn't like others knowing because they judge him harshly on the actions of the past of his birth family.
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Oh ok
Nice
any idea when we can expect an update and new chapter?
9722404
I've got about three fifths of the chapter done, I've just got to work out a few more scenes and work on an ending and do some editing before I post it. Hopefully I'll have it up and posted by Friday, but I hope to have it up sooner.
He is a awesome fighter,I'm happy pear butter and Bright Mac are alive and ok. I guess in this AJ and Big Mac know there Mother is a pear. Can they have a few pear trees.