Four Stars

by Moterius

1 - 6: when going out to explore

(Flare)

Magic poured into my body, not that of a parasite, but that of an alicorn.

I had ‘lost’ against Grogar. I was not sure what he was thinking, but I decided to wait until he left, which he eventually did. I could feel the range of his perception, and as soon as I left it, I stood up, regenerated my rough form with rocks from the vicinity, then threw myself in the air again.

I dared not to hope that he would lower his caution, thinking he had defeated one or the defender of ponykind, for that, he was too smart.

However, I now knew far more than I did before, and I could tell that a good lightning strike would work just as well as my ‘bombs’.

I was careful not to exceed the speed of sound. I did not intend to alert the goat to my presence.

---

“Velvet!” I called out in two-toned disharmony, getting the attention of the unicorn that was busy writing messages and mailing them with nearby pegasi.

“You don’t look so good…” he commented, getting a huff out of me.

“I encountered Grogar. He has powerful magic, strong enough to cut through stone effortlessly. He should not be faced in direct combat by any but experienced, powerful fighters,” I said, rubbing my left eye. It was still not fully regenerated.

“How – ah, right. What else can you tell us about him?”

“His army is made up of undead soldiers. I do not know that for sure, but I could feel them. They are undead,” I/we said, getting him to nod.

“On that topic, there is a message for you.”

“Oh?” I asked, grabbing the envelope.

“How do people even know… oh crap.”

The letter was written in the year 1001… of Celestial Reign. Thousands of years in the future.

It instructed me to search for the guardians Sunshine and Selene, marked by their empty flanks, wings, and horns they both bore.

Seemed like I was not the one who would stop Grogar…

Unfortunately, the letter also mentioned that the guardians have not mingled with other ponies for generations and did not know of the dire situation. Fortunately, a map was included.

“Something important?”

I raised an eyebrow at Velvet.

“You could say that. This may decide the outcome of this war… I cannot help you anymore, at least not for the time being,” I responded causing him to sigh.

“And I’m almost out of mail pegasi, too…”

I gave him a (hopefully) encouraging smile.

“Don’t worry, I’m sure you’ll manage.”

“Thanks. Before you go, though, I have just one question.”

“Eh?”

“How’d you get there and back here – within half a day, without even looking winded?”

I deadpanned.

“I’m still a mess of molten rock.”

“Ah, fair. Well, good luck, I guess,” he grumbled, returning to his paperwork.

---

Do you think he suspects us?

‘He has no reason to,’ I responded to Nightmare, shrugging.

‘Also, should we test how much you boost me?’

Sure.

A quick test revealed that the explosions I created now had a diameter about twice as big as before. This was a substantial power boost, but the problem was that the only comparison I had was that Velvet said that an explosion half that size could be created by an experienced unicorn.

I really needed to meet a legit Celestia…

Flare, look! Over there!

Snapped out of my thoughts, I concentrated on my surroundings again, noticing the valley that was marked on the map. Flying down, I noticed that it was lush, filled with many trees, and completely green.

However, I saw no indications of (civilized) life. But wasn’t it said the guardians lived here?

I decided to meditate again. Wondering why I haven’t done this sooner, I looked at the area around me, eventually…

Finding nothing.

The area here was empty. For at least five decades, no creature had cast any spells here, nor were there any traces of weather magic. That did not mean no ponies were living here – an earth pony’s magic was incredibly hard to detect, after all – but why would go anyone to such lengths to hide?

I’ve been tricked. Why? By whom?

Snarling, I turned tail, flying back to the village I just came from.

That unicorn had a lot to answer for!

Comments

[Feynna]

‘He has no reason to,’ I responded to Nightmare, shrugging.

So, either they have a telepathic link or they are in the same body currently? I'm a bit confused, to be honest.

Anyway, I'm interested in where this goes. I don't think that message was a trap, so Celestia and Luna (because who else would those two be) are actively hiding their presence in some way. Probably. Don't disappoint me, dear! :3

[Moterius]

10559669
Well, yes. Nightmare has the powers of a nightmare, and is possessing Flare.

Also, while yes, that was the plan, the end result will be anticlimactic.

Something that might be worth mentioning is that this world will change a bit due to that, though.

[Snakebot23]

Nice to see an update

[Moterius]

10559919
Consistency, people.
I update (this) once in seven days.

[Snakebot23]

10559955
Ah, okay. I'm not that good of keeping track of time due to a lack of a sleep schedule

[Moterius]

10559996
That is the reason I linked the old version.

I decided against ‘artificially’ increasing my number of published stories, also, with the way I allowed the old version run into nothing, I do not believe it would have been easy or (at least for me) even possible to continue from there.

[LEGION55]

“I’m still a mess of molten rock.”

I think you mean Mass.

[Moterius]

10560114
No, this was intentional.

[Direct Access]

10554058
That wasn't a critic, that was a cry of confusion.
Critic supposed to be specific or have some positive and negative sides, it also just be calm and all-inclusive.

I just want to hear what is going on and how can you explain such a confusing or outright illogical things.

First of all, i must note that you didn't actually answer almost any of my questions. Two things - cold-blooded and space-stuff might be a answer to some of them, but they ultimately even more confusing then questions. One is a pseudo-science and other went somewhere aside from the second sentence.
So.
Here's my questions. Calmly:
- Why does character has no reaction whatsoever after meeting god, losing body and becoming four anthro-demonic magical women? That is far out of any sane human reaction.
- Why does he leaves the world if he was told that his world required him to cause chaos (or whatever) in it? God ignores the issue, despite watching.
- Why... You know what, the whole chapter about meeting fbi is busted. He instantly goes from noob to pro and all stuff about fbi guy who recognizes him as goddess from another world (where he is supposed to be horse) is straight up unbelievable.
- Why the hell does he is capable of sensing entire whole solar system and more, and all stuff in it, like some kind of cheat? Why is he capable of traveling through void(or whatever)? Why is that even all here, if all he got was four bodies with a lotta magic power and a entry-level magic textbook? Wuh?
- Why, oh why does he loses his other bodies, and hopes they will come back on their own, despite the fact you shown earlier, that he has only one mind and must concentrate to control more then one body at a time, and he lost connection?
-... That is enough already, i don't really want to know much more.

My comments are always chapter-specific. Some things i said in the beginning were jokes. You all took them straight.

That said, why are you all keep saying " don't like, don't read?"
I read, because i hope it will get better. I hope that that is a one time issue.
I'm not a masochist. I did left, after i could no longer keep reading, considering the whole next arc was build on top of the one such logical issue.
Besides, comments are not only for praise or criticizm. They wish for communication. If you prefer me to write to your mail box that is possible too, but obviously, other people won't see the answer is they find the same problem and search for the answer below the chapter.
Well, nevermind. You can answer. You can not. I don't think simple explanation can help with a logical hole of THIS proportion, as i see it.

Am i rude? Yes. I know that. Are you people write any criticizm you want from me yourself? Not at all. You just write your reaction, mostly.
Well, my reaction is this.

[LEGION55]

10560964
Ah ok

[Moterius]

10561755
You got a point, but, as I said, I am not an experienced writer yet.
I will eventually redo this story again when I know that my skills have increased more.

What put me off the most was the tone you used, not the critic you had. It seemed like you just wanted to be rude.
As for your questions, some may have answers, some not, but where I am it’s late, so I’ll see if I can answer them tomorrow; also, I do (emphasis here) try to keep a stable, red threat through my stories.