Then is a comparison in time. We walked to the store, then we listen to some records when we got home. Than is a physical comparison. I am taller than him.
Also, here's a nutshell grammar lesson on quotations:
"Francis, you know it isn't your fault we're in this mess. It was my bad judgement that got us stuck here." He said as he looked down towards his m16.
When a line of dialogue in quotation marks isn't a question or an exclamation, it ends in a comma, not a period, followed by a descriptive phrase. The only time lines of dialogue end in a period is if there isn't a descriptive phrase afterwards (He said, she said, etc.).
Therefor, you should replace the period at the end of the quotation with a comma, and lowercase the "H" in "He".
Sorry if you feel if this is a rant. It isn't. I've noticed these errors a lot in other stories. Love the story, though.
I don't think just any random person would be able to make a nuclear power plant explode. It isn't a nuclear bomb. Chernobyl wasn't a nuclear explosion, but a reactor leak that spewed radioactive chemicals everywhere.
Not bad, not bad at all. L4D's one of fave games and you did one helluva start chapter to this. I'll check out some more in a little bit. You got me in the mood to do some more writing.
I love me some L4D, and some ponies.
No offense, but I only read this because you mentioned Nobrains...I generally don't read LFD stories...no offense again...
It should be "were"
Then is a comparison in time. We walked to the store, then we listen to some records when we got home.
Than is a physical comparison. I am taller than him.
Also, here's a nutshell grammar lesson on quotations:
When a line of dialogue in quotation marks isn't a question or an exclamation, it ends in a comma, not a period, followed by a descriptive phrase. The only time lines of dialogue end in a period is if there isn't a descriptive phrase afterwards (He said, she said, etc.).
Therefor, you should replace the period at the end of the quotation with a comma, and lowercase the "H" in "He".
Sorry if you feel if this is a rant. It isn't. I've noticed these errors a lot in other stories. Love the story, though.
I don't think just any random person would be able to make a nuclear power plant explode. It isn't a nuclear bomb. Chernobyl wasn't a nuclear explosion, but a reactor leak that spewed radioactive chemicals everywhere.
1086412 Jees. Dont be a Grammer Nazi
Not bad, not bad at all. L4D's one of fave games and you did one helluva start chapter to this. I'll check out some more in a little bit. You got me in the mood to do some more writing.