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Great chapter by far. Found it absolutely hilarious about what blueblood did. Also I enjoyed our own personal character in this and I laughed extremely hard when he mentioned pinkie pie and the chaos doomsday experiment and everyone’s reaction to the fact. Also I have to say I was most shocked towards the ending and I can’t wait to see how it was even possible for such a thing to happen, I also wander if it will be just much of a shock to the royal family that he already seems to know the dragon was? All in all I like how you are taking this story and it is quickly becoming of one of my favorites that I’ve read and wait to read the next chapter!
Love /hate cliff hanger chapters but the do leave us wanting more. I like how git the side characters upfront instead up just having show up when the games starts. Lets them develop and fleshed out the world. I cant wait to see the explination fir this dragoness and spike knowing her but no one else.
9135134 It's always nice to hear someone managed to get a smile and laugh from a story. Glad to hear Blueblood's part has worked out. Technically, he did similarly in the original but I felt he seemed a little too quick to open conflict in the beginning. I felt like a reformed(or AU, matured, etc.) Blueblood might have been open to retribution against someone that wronged him so badly but would have tried to be a bit more subtle about it, at least at first. In part because he doesn't want to see his friends and aunts see him at his worst or reminding them of his past and part because court training would have put him in the habit of hiding his reactions. Also glad to hear someone likes the doctor. Yes, he's basically a living McGuffin brought in to help justify the change in the storyline but...Mad Scientist! How can I not do want to see a character like that do well? Not to mention he is something of an homage to some of my favorite fictional characters. Pleasantly surprised to hear the ending was still surprising. Maybe it's the fact that my writing it and knowing the events ahead of time boogers with my ability to accurately judge suspense, but I was kind of afraid everyone would be rolling their eyes thinking it would be way too obvious. As for the royal family? Without giving away too much, the earlier part of the story did have them agreeing on the plan and talking about needing extreme resources and pushing morality lines, so it kind of goes without saying they would mostly be in the know more than anyone else. However, rest assured there will be at least one or two surprises for them as well in the next chapter. Hope it continues to entertain!.
9136585 Good! Glad to see someone else noticed and/or enjoyed seeing that. Also genuinely thought that personality would fit well here. Seeing shocker in the orginal, I tended to think of Mr. 'awkward praises' from that abridged and thought it would work here. I actually plan on adding a few touch ups to the rest of Sentinel's crew personalities. Just a few little ideas to toy with and maybe add some more depth to the story.
9137027 I know what you mean. Can't keep track of how many times I cursed/praised an author for a good cliff hanger. Yet, here I am trying to do the same thing. Glad to hear you like how the pacing and introduction of the character is going so far. I had hoped I managed to give a little mystery to Moonstone with the dream scene and introduction. Actually still kind of worried about how well the pacing will go as we move forward. Still, just going to move ahead and hope for the best. As for explanation? As I said before, might be a little out there. However, I like to think that classic Syfy like Jurassic park, Startreck, Dr. Who, and others prove that audiences can be forgiving of stretching belief as long as we can have fun with the story. Here's hoping I still manage that here.
The doctor cut himself off, blinked, and looked to the side of the group. “Umm. Pardon if zis seems abrupt but…vat is your name, fraulien?”
“Oh, me? I’m Pinkie Pie!” the party pony chirped.
“Pie. Ya, ya. Und does your family come from a quiet profession? Somezing like, oh say, blacksmiz, bakers, or hmmm,” he hummed and tilted his head back and forth lightly as if searching for a term before flatly saying, “a rock farm, perhaps?”
“Yupperoni! The Pie farm is the bestest, and most profitable rock farm in Equestria!”
“Ya, gut, ya ya,” Strangelove nodded absently as he stroked his chin thoughtfully with one hand and tapped the handle of his wheelchair with the other. “Perhaps it vas a success after all.”
...........................That..........explains...............so much.................TOO much actually.
Alright, things are going better than expected. Good work!
Great chapter by far. Found it absolutely hilarious about what blueblood did. Also I enjoyed our own personal character in this and I laughed extremely hard when he mentioned pinkie pie and the chaos doomsday experiment and everyone’s reaction to the fact. Also I have to say I was most shocked towards the ending and I can’t wait to see how it was even possible for such a thing to happen, I also wander if it will be just much of a shock to the royal family that he already seems to know the dragon was? All in all I like how you are taking this story and it is quickly becoming of one of my favorites that I’ve read and wait to read the next chapter!
I'm getting the Attack on Titan Abridged vibe going on.![:twilightsheepish:](https://static.fimfiction.net/images/emoticons/twilightsheepish.png)
Love /hate cliff hanger chapters but the do leave us wanting more. I like how git the side characters upfront instead up just having show up when the games starts. Lets them develop and fleshed out the world. I cant wait to see the explination fir this dragoness and spike knowing her but no one else.
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Thanks! I'll try to keep it that way
9135134
. Glad to hear Blueblood's part has worked out. Technically, he did similarly in the original but I felt he seemed a little too quick to open conflict in the beginning. I felt like a reformed(or AU, matured, etc.) Blueblood might have been open to retribution against someone that wronged him so badly but would have tried to be a bit more subtle about it, at least at first. In part because he doesn't want to see his friends and aunts see him at his worst or reminding them of his past and part because court training would have put him in the habit of hiding his reactions. Also glad to hear someone likes the doctor
. Yes, he's basically a living McGuffin brought in to help justify the change in the storyline but...Mad Scientist
! How can I not do want to see a character like that do well? Not to mention he is something of an homage to some of my favorite fictional characters. Pleasantly surprised to hear the ending was still surprising. Maybe it's the fact that my writing it and knowing the events ahead of time boogers with my ability to accurately judge suspense, but I was kind of afraid everyone would be rolling their eyes thinking it would be way too obvious
. As for the royal family? Without giving away too much, the earlier part of the story did have them agreeing on the plan and talking about needing extreme resources and pushing morality lines, so it kind of goes without saying they would mostly be in the know more than anyone else. However, rest assured there will be at least one or two surprises for them as well in the next chapter
. Hope it continues to entertain
!.
It's always nice to hear someone managed to get a smile and laugh from a story
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. Also genuinely thought that personality would fit well here. Seeing shocker in the orginal, I tended to think of Mr. 'awkward praises' from that abridged and thought it would work here. I actually plan on adding a few touch ups to the rest of Sentinel's crew personalities. Just a few little ideas to toy with and maybe add some more depth to the story.
Good! Glad to see someone else noticed and/or enjoyed seeing that
9137027
. Yet, here I am trying to do the same thing
. Glad to hear you like how the pacing and introduction of the character is going so far. I had hoped I managed to give a little mystery to Moonstone with the dream scene and introduction. Actually still kind of worried about how well the pacing will go as we move forward
. Still, just going to move ahead and hope for the best. As for explanation? As I said before, might be a little out there. However, I like to think that classic Syfy like Jurassic park, Startreck, Dr. Who, and others prove that audiences can be forgiving of stretching belief as long as we can have fun with the story. Here's hoping I still manage that here.
I know what you mean. Can't keep track of how many times I cursed/praised an author for a good cliff hanger
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Well as long as it doesn't try to brake what you already set up then I don't think you got anything to worry about.
...........................That..........explains...............so much.................TOO much actually.