Oh no, nah-ah! you cant just make all the action happen off-camera and not show us! you better make up for this in future chapters once the girls are free.
9098393 No offence but people moan if there's too much and now they moan if it's a tease, not every episode has have sex in it. Plus how would you put in several hours worth of sex into a story?.
9098420 Didn't mean for my comment to come off as rude or angry it was more of a joke pocking fun of the fact that there was an orgy but we didnt see it. "not every episode has to have sex in it." that is correct and its fine, i just find it weird considering you tend to put a lot of sex in almost every chapter you make. Not a complaint just pointing it out. "Plus how would you put in several hours worth of sex into a story?" Well... it can be done but it depends on a few things. Story length, single or multi-chapter, how much time the author wants to sink into it etc... Sorry if i offended you, it wasn't my intention.
She even gave me a twirl as she showed them off to me, A smile crept across her face as my re-emerging raging boner gave her the answer for her little show.
It had been a couple of days since then, Rarity had made herself some clothes before heading to the boutique so she could thank Coco.
It was a bit jarring suddenly jumping a head like that. When I want to do a time skip I generally put three asterisks "*" Between the two sentences to help illustrate the point. I believe it's what most books/stories use actually.
Usually with a couple of spaces between lines, So the end result should look something like this:
She even gave me a twirl as she showed them off to me, A smile crept across her face as my re-emerging raging boner gave her the answer for her little show.
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It had been a couple of days since then, Rarity had made herself some clothes before heading to the boutique so she could thank Coco.
In her hands was a pair of very girly underwear, the bra and panties had several layers of the frilly ribbons and the panties had the white bow on the front. She walked up to Rainbow and started putting the underwear on her, several laughs came from Rarity as she put the underwear on Rainbow. "Oh that's very becoming darling" Rarity said standing back as she admired the view, From the pics and vids of Rainbow, I'd assume her to be tomboyish so seeing her wearing girly underwear was mind-blowing. Rarity wasn't done yet as she started playing with Rainbow's hair, in no time her normal style was replaced by a more feminine look. And don't get me started on where Rarity got her make-up from, one big poof of clouds later and Rainbow was now wearing make-up.
hahahahahahahahaha. i saw that coming. i literally thought 'heh, she is totally putting that on Dash.' i actually thought this when she picked out the materials. when she first grabbed pink i first thought Fluttershy cause her mane but then i thought 'hehe, Rarity is going to torment Dashie.'
It had been a couple of days since then, Rarity had made herself some clothes before heading to the boutique so she could thank Coco. She had also brought back several materials so we could make more clothes, this gave me more options to work with. Rarity also gave me the measurements of her and the girls in every intimate detail, as she saw me draw out ideas for clothing she couldn't help but ask. "Why did you get into making clothing for ponies?", the answer was simple "I got bored with the human body. At least with ponies, I have things to work around such as remembering the tail holes for all races and then making the changes for the pegasi race, plus I don't know why but the allure of designing for ponies feels more" I struggled to think of the correct word. Luckily Rarity knew how I felt so I didn't have to finish the sentence.
hehe. that must have been jarring for Coco.
*walks in through front door*
Coco: *walks backwards into front room cause reasons* "Welcome to Carousel Boutique where everything is Chiq, Unique, and Magni...."
Oh no, nah-ah! you cant just make all the action happen off-camera and not show us! you better make up for this in future chapters once the girls are free.
9098393
No offence but people moan if there's too much and now they moan if it's a tease, not every episode has have sex in it.
Plus how would you put in several hours worth of sex into a story?.
9098420
Didn't mean for my comment to come off as rude or angry it was more of a joke pocking fun of the fact that there was an orgy but we didnt see it.
"not every episode has to have sex in it." that is correct and its fine, i just find it weird considering you tend to put a lot of sex in almost every chapter you make. Not a complaint just pointing it out.
"Plus how would you put in several hours worth of sex into a story?" Well... it can be done but it depends on a few things.
Story length, single or multi-chapter, how much time the author wants to sink into it etc...
Sorry if i offended you, it wasn't my intention.
It was a bit jarring suddenly jumping a head like that. When I want to do a time skip I generally put three asterisks "*" Between the two sentences to help illustrate the point. I believe it's what most books/stories use actually.
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First one. Like this: * * *
Usually with a couple of spaces between lines, So the end result should look something like this:
A good story man, i wonder what will happen to derpy, she needs love too.
hahahahahahahahaha. i saw that coming. i literally thought 'heh, she is totally putting that on Dash.' i actually thought this when she picked out the materials. when she first grabbed pink i first thought Fluttershy cause her mane but then i thought 'hehe, Rarity is going to torment Dashie.'
hehe. that must have been jarring for Coco.
*walks in through front door*
Coco: *walks backwards into front room cause reasons* "Welcome to Carousel Boutique where everything is Chiq, Unique, and Magni...."
"Coco, darling, it's so good to....."
Coco: *faints*