1046094 Lol, and feedback is something authors shouldn't dismiss. People are gonna point out typos. Then we, as authors, fix them. It's the way of the world(by the way, you forgot the "S" in "honestly" in the title of chapter 2, just to start. You have numerous typos and grammar errors). Slip Kid made a valid point, the word is "through". "Thru" is a word invented by fast food chains, and should never be used in a narrative. It's like when people say "sk8" and mean "skate". If you want to make your story seem more professional, you should try to use proper English. Get yourself an editor/pre-reader, it's seriously super helpful. As for the story itself, it's a fairly fun read so far. You made a bold move in bringing your own original Gear to Equestria, and I can respect that. It gives you allot more creative freedom, and I really like the dreams/flashbacks with Dedrick's sister. I'm interested to see what kind of conflict you have in store for your COG.
Damn this was good. MOAR
MOAR!
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Feedback is a way for the author to know how well they did and what the people want moar of.
one word : MOAR !
To good moar
1046094 Lol, and feedback is something authors shouldn't dismiss. People are gonna point out typos. Then we, as authors, fix them. It's the way of the world(by the way, you forgot the "S" in "honestly" in the title of chapter 2, just to start. You have numerous typos and grammar errors). Slip Kid made a valid point, the word is "through". "Thru" is a word invented by fast food chains, and should never be used in a narrative. It's like when people say "sk8" and mean "skate". If you want to make your story seem more professional, you should try to use proper English. Get yourself an editor/pre-reader, it's seriously super helpful. As for the story itself, it's a fairly fun read so far. You made a bold move in bringing your own original Gear to Equestria, and I can respect that. It gives you allot more creative freedom, and I really like the dreams/flashbacks with Dedrick's sister. I'm interested to see what kind of conflict you have in store for your COG.
OH GOD WHY ARE YOU TAKING SO LONG TO CREATE CHAPTERS!
I WILL MARRY YOU IF YOU UPDATE MORE OFTEN!
I'M A VERY BEAUTIFUL OVERWEIGHT MAN AND I KNOW HOW TO PLEASE MY STALLION!
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I put up a blog post about why. Not till the 27th aor so.
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It's Derpy/Ditzy, what would you expect?
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I, just now, read your full comment. The chapter will be up some time this week.
Once I find a editor.
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Are you offering?