As much as I love the Tarzan references, you REALLY need to work on your grammar and writing skills. It was difficult to the point of painful reading this chapter. I hope the next few chapters are of higher quality than this as your writing style grows and improves. If not, I STRONGLY suggest you get a beta-reader to review and correct your chapters before posting them.
Ponies are A**holes
If Zecora is anything to go by, I’m surprised the two didn’t just kill the baby right there at that moment.
As much as I love the Tarzan references, you REALLY need to work on your grammar and writing skills. It was difficult to the point of painful reading this chapter. I hope the next few chapters are of higher quality than this as your writing style grows and improves. If not, I STRONGLY suggest you get a beta-reader to review and correct your chapters before posting them.