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I suggest proof reading, there are many errors. Also you have committed the greatest sin a FiMfiction author can commit, an OC, overpowered, alicorn. This does how ever, have an interesting plot. If you clean it up and tone it down a bit, you could have a good story. Best of luck.
Don't be discouraged by the feedback you get. All authors, fanfic or not, have at some point written a mary sue story. I recommend trying to 1.change the color pallet, black and red do not work for an alicorn, much less an MLP OC. 2.change character species, alicorns are essentially gods in MLP. Try being a batpony (also known as a Thestral), that will still allow for the use of fear and stealth in the night. 3.change the tone. Stories like Fallout Equestria can get away with being dark and gritty because it's set in an alternate timeline where rape, murder, and such is the norm. You can't get away with those in a timeline that is like the canon one. 4.Change the name. Moonlight Guardian sounds way to generic to be a name. Working off of the Thestral idea from #2, her name should be "Night eye" or "Midnight shield". 5.write plenty of character faults. My OC, Singal Flare, for example, is a pegasus and yet is perhaps the worst flier in Equestria. He is also socially awkward when it comes to talking to other ponies since he was adopted by two earth ponies who very protective of him.
(or at least that's his purely equestrian backstory, he also has a human/pony backstory but I don't want to get off topic.) . If you want to give your Oc amnesia of some sort, make your OC a social reck, and give her an insatiable curiosity of everything around her. 7.No human weapons. This is Equestria we're talking about, and the chances of an ancient Asian weaponry in a world dominated by medieval/modern architecture and culture is slim. We also have not really seen any actual weapons outside of magic and good old hoof v hoof action, so don't give your character blades.
Sorry if this seems overwhelming but as a fellow fanfic writer, I know what it feels like to pour your heart out into a story only for people to criticize it poorly or rudely. Every fanfic has the potential to become something amazing, but no one got without writing a few bad eggs. So keep on writing and if you need a proofreader, I'll be right here waiting for you.