Colgate's Dentistry

by Twilicorn

Coming to Ponyville

Colgate magically levitated her suitcases behind her, ignoring the staring ponies as she approached the building ahead. Made of sturdy brick, it was built to last. A sign jutted from above the doorway, proudly pronouncing 'Colgate's Dentistry' in bold letters. Entering the building, she ignored how everything looked until she arrived at the upstairs flat, dropping her suitcases on the bed with a sigh.

Wait. Bed? Looking around the room, she saw it was finely furnished, containing a bed, radio, and many more furniture pieces. Going back down the stairs, she saw the waiting room was also done nicely, with faux-leather couches and a nice desk where the receptionist sat.

"Hey," muttered the receptionist around the quill in her jaws, scribbling on her paper. Dropping the quill, she spun her chair to face her employer. "I'm Ink. Ink Blotch to be specific, but you can call me Ink. I'm your receptionist here at C.D., so don't mind me. You already have some appointments for tomorrow by the way. Diamond Tiara," she said with a scowl, "And a few other foals. No adults so far, but I'm guessing you'll have some by the end of the week. You're our first dentist in a while, d'ya know that?" Colgate blinked slowly, shocked by how fast the mare could speak.

"Tomorrow?" she repeated, staring at the receptionist intently.

"Tomorrow," she confirmed with a smile, then turned back towards her desk. Colgate let out a long, low sigh, then headed down the hall. The walls were a calming creme, and she saw they branched in three directions. Straight to her right was what she could guess was her office. She poked her head in and saw it had the same faux-leather furnishings as the waiting room, complete with desk and chair. Ducking out, she headed straight ahead, then took a sharp right.

This, she could presume, was the foal's area. A small room held toys, and the chair was much smaller. The tools sat on a small silver tray, prepped and ready to go. Small bags sat on a circular table in the middle of the room, toy dispensers surrounding the table. Colgate smiled, a true, friendly smile, and examined the toy dispensers. A coin-slot was affixed to most of them, except the ones with toothbrushes, toothpaste, floss, and stickers. Opening the drawers randomly, she found one filled with small silver coins, and magically lifted one. Sliding it into the slot, she turned the lever and let out a small squeal as she saw a bouncy ball roll out and into the bag below.

Backing away, she left the foal's area and approached the adult's room. It was quite similar to the foal's room, save the larger seats and lack of toys. She poked around, and found in a small back room there was bags also, pre-filled with all toothbrushing necessities. In another back room, there were a few large x-ray machines, but she ignored them. X-rays really weren't helpful, unless there was a root problem. Then again, if these ponies hadn't seen a dentist in years...

Colgate left this office as well, trotting up the stairs to begin unpacking her small bags. Out came the formal wear, surrounded in a pale blue aura as into the drawers it went. Next came the toothbrush, toothpaste, floss, and toilet paper into the bathroom. Finally came the small stuffed tooth, holding a small toothbrush. She lifted it to her face, cuddling it gently before setting it tucked under the covers of her bed.

Magically flipping on the radio, she magically adjusted the tuner to one of the two stations Ponyville had and sat down, eager to listen.

"Well, this is DJ-PON3 once again, and we have a special announcement from one of our listeners! Take it away, Pinkie Pie!"

"I just wanted to invite alllll of you to a party tomorrow night for the newest member of our town and newest dentist in fifty-tree years! Colgate!" the radio then clicked off, Colgate leaned back on her bed in confusion. How did one of the Elements of Harmony know who she was? Shuddering, she curled under the covers of her bed, and tucking Mr. Tooth under one arm, she fell into a deep sleep.

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A/N: I'm aware this chapter is rather short, but since it is the Prologue I figured I could make it a bit shorter than future chapters. The next chapter'll be short as well.

Comments

[Patient X]

Very good first chapter! Let's see how the second one is

[wariyoshi]

Now, I'm not a critic, but if I was one you'd get points off the bat for using Colgate. People rarely use Colgate, and she could be such a better character! But anyways, I liked this story, and I hope it'll flesh out a bit in the plot And also, it would be nice if there was a liiittle bit of light comedy so that it didn't seem so bland. The last thing that I noticed is that there were a few grammatical errors sprinkled about. Now, obviously, nobody's perfect, but some of these thing seemed like they could've been avoidable with a simple proof-read Maybe I'm just a grammar-nazi, but I think that grammar's the kind of thing that separates an okay story from a top notch story. Other than that, I liked this I briefly looked at a few of your other stories and I noticed that you only wrote like 2 chapters for a bunch of them I hope you don't continue that trend with everypony's favorite dentist, because there are like NO good Colgate fanfics.

I don't usually like to criticize, but I thought that if it was constructive you wouldn't mind as much I'll give this a like and favorite it

[Ziggrrauglurr]

I hope to see more of this. Slice of life stories are the bread of the fanfictions, it let us see the pony world as if we had many more episodes than broadcasted.

Kudos for using a scarcely used pony as Colgate. I can't wait to see the party, and her dismay of overabundance of candies in ponyvile's diet.

The pacing seems ok, but it lacks some detail. Try to make slightly longer chapters. Please keep it up, it's interesting to read your story