Given a choice; whether to do right or wrong, most chose to do the right thing. But when a man is plagued by nightmares and is fueled by a need for vengeance, will he answer the call, or will his new pony friends help him find peace?
Although I'm not a huge Skyrim fan, this is actually very interesting! I'm looking forward to more from this story!
However, if I can suggest, how would you like me to proofread your story? It has a few areas that look a bit clunky that I'm sure I could iron out. If not, I understand, just a thought~!
8605357 Well first off thank you for your opinion! It really means a lot man. And as far as proofreading goes, let me know what you think of this thus far and of the future chapters yet to come. Its gonna take me a while because I'm old fashioned and I am writing it all out in a notebook. Any and all opinions are welcomed.
9126381 Yeah I know, but I felt like that I was using the word 'mage' too much to say what they are. There are some adapts amongst them but you'll have to wait until either for the rest of this story or a sequel.
After reading this prologue, I have to say I think you missed the comedy tag, cause there seems to be a lot of silly things going on, mostly with the narrative. Besides that, seems promising so far.
9720056 Yeah I probably should have added in the comedy tag but in later chapters it won't be as silly... trust me, its gonna get real emotional. Thank you for reading by the way
Yah!!! My first story and I think its going great. I hope you all enjoy it as it continues.
Although I'm not a huge Skyrim fan, this is actually very interesting! I'm looking forward to more from this story!
However, if I can suggest, how would you like me to proofread your story? It has a few areas that look a bit clunky that I'm sure I could iron out. If not, I understand, just a thought~!
8605357
Well first off thank you for your opinion! It really means a lot man. And as far as proofreading goes, let me know what you think of this thus far and of the future chapters yet to come. Its gonna take me a while because I'm old fashioned and I am writing it all out in a notebook. Any and all opinions are welcomed.
This isn't really very relavent but Adept is rank for mages not a completely different thing
9126381
Yeah I know, but I felt like that I was using the word 'mage' too much to say what they are. There are some adapts amongst them but you'll have to wait until either for the rest of this story or a sequel.
After reading this prologue, I have to say I think you missed the comedy tag, cause there seems to be a lot of silly things going on, mostly with the narrative. Besides that, seems promising so far.
9720056
Yeah I probably should have added in the comedy tag but in later chapters it won't be as silly... trust me, its gonna get real emotional. Thank you for reading by the way
I like this. I also love skyrim
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I'm glad that you like it! Stick around, for this journey has only begun.