Limestone gets a little too excited to see her sister Pinkie again. Hopefully the first in a short series.
Feels like this is an anthro fic, if so it needs to be tagged as such. Also, a few minor grammatical and spelling problems, but not many.
Glad to see it's incomplete. This is really good.
Punctuation seems to be the only thing your having issues with. Other than that, great read altogether.
I don't get why the helpful critics are getting downvoted their right. I can sorta see it if i go back and reread, but yes it is a hot story.
This was a awesome start.
Heavy sleeper... Probably more of a sleep walker. There are literally people that can sleep through sex, interesting psychological situation.
Feels like this is an anthro fic, if so it needs to be tagged as such. Also, a few minor grammatical and spelling problems, but not many.
Glad to see it's incomplete. This is really good.
Punctuation seems to be the only thing your having issues with. Other than that, great read altogether.
I don't get why the helpful critics are getting downvoted their right. I can sorta see it if i go back and reread, but yes it is a hot story.
This was a awesome start.
Heavy sleeper... Probably more of a sleep walker. There are literally people that can sleep through sex, interesting psychological situation.