“Your welcome. However, it was wrong of me to barge in like that when you’re not decent.”

Gets me hot and bothered to see a rural country farmer speak so formally.

Big Macintosh is just a simple farm pony living on the outskirts of the small town of Ponyville. He lives with his two sisters, his paternal grandfather, and (recently) maternal grandfather. For the most part, Big Macintosh, of Big Mac as most ponies call him, he’s had a regular life as an apple farmer; however, his life would start to change when he meets some pony that became the apple of his eye.

That's a pretty sizable error, and that's in the first sentence of this story...I'm pretty sure Granny Smith is a mare--sure she can be quite a dick to everypony, but she's still a mare...

>>DanvilleBengal

That was an accident; I fixed it. Thank you for pointing this out to me so I could take action to correct it.

>>ImMrNoobHeadFU1

Thank you. I was going to actually have them do it or at least have one of the fantasizing about the other, but it felt too soon for me and I didn't want to rush it.

Thank you for commenting.

She's not one of those girls who uses him for labor?

>>OmniFox
No, I would never write Sugar Belle like that.

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You're welcome I'm pretty sure that there were a few other errors I'm sure that you or other eagle-eye readers can catch, but I had to comment on the most blatant one, particularly when we know how his family goes now--Grand Pear is his mother's father, and Granny Smith is his dad's mother...

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Good.