Sunset Shimmer meets Sunset Shimmer...
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not what i was expecting based off the last chapter but very welcome
AJ quit keeping secrets from Rarity. Not worth the cost.
And yeah the Fluttershy thing seems forced.
9017111
I was trying to foreshadow it but I mostly had Fluttershy’s perspective to work with. She thinks she is normal.
9017133
Still feels odd for the story. You say it's slice of life but when I see the title and the premise I just don't see that. I see an event story. The two sunset's meeting and it's results.
Now I like the story so please see this as constructive criticism. I want this story to be the best it can be and honestly this chapter just feels off to the overall story. Yes it's sweet to see Big Mac and Cheerilee married but it doesn't really progress the story as I see it. This could have been in the background. I just don't see it worthy of its own chapter in a story about Sunset Shimmer meeting her human self.
9017268
That is fair. I will try to stay focused but I really want to show the world and the characters. Also the inciting incident may have been Sunset meeting Sunset but their paths aren't the only one to collide.
Ps. I don't mind harsh criticism. I am happy that I am getting any feedback.
9017386
Some don't take well and maybe a side story that runs parallel to the Sunset one. I get wanting to expand the world you made. This chapter is well done just feels like filler away from the story.