Wanna know the first rule to successful polyamory? Sharing is caring! That's what your six marefriends say, at least. And considering the lengths they went through to drag you into this relationship, you can’t really argue.
Loved everything about the chapter. The beginning was a nice introduction to Fluttershy as she proves to be a tough yet sweet gal (wrestling a bear yet calmly chatting with him and expressing concern for the MC). I also loved the flashback of Fluttershy feeling bad about a critter that died in her care, yet the MC comforted her and offered to helped in the eulogy to the family. Fluttershy was a complete cutie in the chapter with how shy she acted and how positively she reacted to hand holding and head rubs. Still, got surprised when she did the strawberry eating and the fact that she could pin the guy with her arm when making him rest on her lap. The date was adorable and I loved the interaction between the MC and Discord. Thanks for the great chapter, dude.
This story just keeps getting better and better. Love the introduction with Shy' and the flashback with the bunny death shows how smart (somewhat) the MC is at making good advice. Discords part was also really funny and, personally, in character to what he might do to someone who hurts Fluttershy. Keep up the awesome work.
your first story is doing absolutely amazing by the way and to answer your question about your writing, its perfectly fine to me but I have a few questions of my own and one of them is why is fluttershy calling the MC 'mister' I thought it was just anon
You took the time to scrutinize her. Fluttershy had a very maternal stature, thick in all the right ways, with a quiet and unassuming beauty to her. It was uncommon for her to wear wakeup, though she did sometimes use scented lipbalm.
Gosh, this was beautiful! Your Fluttershy is really precious. And very close to the one in the show, really. I can see things going like this.
I must confess, when I read the part about the blood not coming out, I had flashbacks to a Discworld novel. A character there, haunted by guilt over a murder, tries to wash the blood away too, but even after hours and hours of scrubbing and scrubbing and screaming, it just won't go away, not even when he switched to using wire wool...
Anyhow! Since Discord isn't likely to be romantically interested in Fluttershy here, I'm wondering if all this romance will inspire him to get closer to Celestia. Just for teasing purposes, of course. Nothing more.
8388210 What mistake are you speaking of? I don't see any 'wakeup' there!
8388973 Once the date chapters are done, we'll go back to normal chrono-chapters. Felt it would be better to stick all the relevant scenes into one chapter to move along the plot rather than stringing them out.
8387870 Once again, the MC is designed to act as a stand-in for the reader. He doesn't have a name, so the other characters use nicknames and such so that the reader can more easily insert themselves or whoever into his place.
Though I do have to wonder if I should get rid of that tag if it's going to cause so much confusion. Also, it seems like people are just downvoting because of it. I got nearly as many downvotes as upvotes on this chapter with the first 6-7 hours. Has to be some reason, because no one's commenting that the story is necessarily bad.
8390233 I think the reason you got as many downvotes as upvotes is because some people don't like how the MC is given nicknames, even though you stated that this is supposed to be an Anon in equestria romance story and the MC is a Stand-in for anything but its possibly due to the fact that this story is gonna be very long so those readers that downvoted are probably annoyed that the main character doesn't have anyway for them to be attach to the MC like most romance stories are today.
I also remember a few years ago (maybe in late 2014, early 2015 on this site) is that people were writing a lot of clopfics with 'Anon' in the description of those stories and not a lot people liked them, but I hardly believe that's the reason for people to downvote on your story.
Also people today like to see the MC backstory as in childhood, parents, etc. basically their lives before going to equestria but Anon stories, you can't really do that.
8390233 I actually like the nicknames being used in place of 'anon'. I hope you'll have a chapter, or section within a chapter, that explains how the girls came up with this idea.
In regards to variety I believe that it can add a necessary unique aspect to each relationship but should not sacrifice the overall thematic nature of the writing so far. Please keep up the good work thank you
Oh fucking shit it was Pinkiepalooza all over again! Abandon ship! Abandon ship! The SS Fuck You was going down, victim of crazy mare allure-torpedo bombings! Every man and pony for themselves!
Anons first contact with Fluttershy was awesome. Gotta say, that i love your writing style. Easy to read and focus on the story itself.
Loved everything about the chapter. The beginning was a nice introduction to Fluttershy as she proves to be a tough yet sweet gal (wrestling a bear yet calmly chatting with him and expressing concern for the MC). I also loved the flashback of Fluttershy feeling bad about a critter that died in her care, yet the MC comforted her and offered to helped in the eulogy to the family. Fluttershy was a complete cutie in the chapter with how shy she acted and how positively she reacted to hand holding and head rubs. Still, got surprised when she did the strawberry eating and the fact that she could pin the guy with her arm when making him rest on her lap. The date was adorable and I loved the interaction between the MC and Discord. Thanks for the great chapter, dude.
I see Discord is an OOTS fan.
This story just keeps getting better and better. Love the introduction with Shy' and the flashback with the bunny death shows how smart (somewhat) the MC is at making good advice. Discords part was also really funny and, personally, in character to what he might do to someone who hurts Fluttershy. Keep up the awesome work.
your first story is doing absolutely amazing by the way and to answer your question about your writing, its perfectly fine to me but I have a few questions of my own and one of them is why is fluttershy calling the MC 'mister' I thought it was just anon
Fluttershy has this set as her morning alarm. xD
Gosh, this was beautiful! Your Fluttershy is really precious. And very close to the one in the show, really. I can see things going like this.
I must confess, when I read the part about the blood not coming out, I had flashbacks to a Discworld novel. A character there, haunted by guilt over a murder, tries to wash the blood away too, but even after hours and hours of scrubbing and scrubbing and screaming, it just won't go away, not even when he switched to using wire wool...
Anyhow! Since Discord isn't likely to be romantically interested in Fluttershy here, I'm wondering if all this romance will inspire him to get closer to Celestia. Just for teasing purposes, of course. Nothing more.
I'm more for chronologically ordered events, but I can let this slip since it's not been too bad on this story.
“PS. This scroll will self-destruct at the completion of Explosive Runes.”
Order of the Stick?
8388210
What mistake are you speaking of? I don't see any 'wakeup' there!
8388973
Once the date chapters are done, we'll go back to normal chrono-chapters. Felt it would be better to stick all the relevant scenes into one chapter to move along the plot rather than stringing them out.
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Yay for references.
8387870
Once again, the MC is designed to act as a stand-in for the reader. He doesn't have a name, so the other characters use nicknames and such so that the reader can more easily insert themselves or whoever into his place.
Though I do have to wonder if I should get rid of that tag if it's going to cause so much confusion. Also, it seems like people are just downvoting because of it. I got nearly as many downvotes as upvotes on this chapter with the first 6-7 hours. Has to be some reason, because no one's commenting that the story is necessarily bad.
What do you guys think?
8390233
Thank all holy entities!
I'm sorry, but my brain is very OCD.
8390233 I think the reason you got as many downvotes as upvotes is because some people don't like how the MC is given nicknames, even though you stated that this is supposed to be an Anon in equestria romance story and the MC is a Stand-in for anything but its possibly due to the fact that this story is gonna be very long so those readers that downvoted are probably annoyed that the main character doesn't have anyway for them to be attach to the MC like most romance stories are today.
I also remember a few years ago (maybe in late 2014, early 2015 on this site) is that people were writing a lot of clopfics with 'Anon' in the description of those stories and not a lot people liked them, but I hardly believe that's the reason for people to downvote on your story.
Also people today like to see the MC backstory as in childhood, parents, etc. basically their lives before going to equestria but Anon stories, you can't really do that.
Well this is wonderful the writing and story is fantastic
8390233
I actually like the nicknames being used in place of 'anon'. I hope you'll have a chapter, or section within a chapter, that explains how the girls came up with this idea.
In regards to variety I believe that it can add a necessary unique aspect to each relationship but should not sacrifice the overall thematic nature of the writing so far. Please keep up the good work thank you
This made short and giggle. Congratulations.
Oh-ho-ho! Dungeons & Dragons for the win!
-Ru