8270400 Sorry🙇 I tried but since I know the story the mistakes I made were kinda over looked but as you can see in the author's note I had asked people to tell me if they found any so I can correct them.
Spelling and grammar are not the only problem. The real major issue is the entire structure of the story. Sentence structure, paragraph structure, scenes, details, character interactions, pacing, etc. It makes the story comes off rushed, hastily put together, and kind of a chore to read. There's just isn't a good flow to the story while reading it, and I suspect a lot of down votes are going to be from how the story has been written, instead of the story material itself.
As you said, this is your first fic, and the writing style really shows that fact. I take it that you haven't written much, if any, before this story. Sadly, I can't give much advice except to continue writing to gain more experience, and to research on ways to help improve your writing. If possible, find someone who is really good at proofreading, and can give you pointers to help better yourself in storytelling.
was this even proofread?
8270400
Sorry🙇
I tried but since I know the story the mistakes I made were kinda over looked but as you can see in the author's note I had asked people to tell me if they found any so I can correct them.
Spelling and grammar are not the only problem. The real major issue is the entire structure of the story. Sentence structure, paragraph structure, scenes, details, character interactions, pacing, etc. It makes the story comes off rushed, hastily put together, and kind of a chore to read. There's just isn't a good flow to the story while reading it, and I suspect a lot of down votes are going to be from how the story has been written, instead of the story material itself.
As you said, this is your first fic, and the writing style really shows that fact. I take it that you haven't written much, if any, before this story. Sadly, I can't give much advice except to continue writing to gain more experience, and to research on ways to help improve your writing. If possible, find someone who is really good at proofreading, and can give you pointers to help better yourself in storytelling.
Just keep moving forward.
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Thanks