When Twilight is tasked with searching the wilds of the Crystal Kingdom, she discovers a magical artifact that appears to have no ties to Sombra or anyone else. What power does it possess, and how will their lives change?
I like where this story is going, it's willing to jump controllers as needed, and keeps things fluid. Some more ponies with the instruction that the collar is good and should be obeyed, and even if one should fall, others would immediately take up the good work.
Oh, this is shaping up to be a great story so fas, I Certainly didn't expect Twilight to be discarded by the magic of the coral much less be turned into a cow and have AJ take the lead from this point on. I love the idea of Twilight's horn becoming a dildo and that it was removed from her body; I wonder if we will see letter in the story. I can't wait to see what other shenanigans will come up next in Poniville, I hope we get to see more of the more obscure ponies in the series and all around Equestria. I hope you will do Flash Sentry and Sunburst, Thunderlane and Rumble would be great too.
Hadithi ilikuwa nzuri! Nilipenda maendeleo ya tabia na jinsi ulivyobadili kati ya matukio! Maelezo yako yalinifurahisha na natumaini kufanya vizuri! Hakikisha usiweke mchuzi katika kufulia!
8475800 I took a bit of a break due to sickness. I'm intending on working on it this week. I'll let everyone know, but it should be the next couple weeks.
8517925 A lot of stuff came up, as I ended up taking over lead on a MUCK, but I'm still on it. Once I get things on track there, I will be back on this story. :) Thanks a lot!
In contrast with the last guy to comment, I don't have issues with rape in my smut, only murder. And by my count, we went through 0 rapes and 3 murders, because if anyone tries to tell me Twilight Sparkle didn't die the moment her mind was melted, I'll laugh and back away.
8753788 Yeah, that's my point, I don't think she can be turned back, not unless we're willing to confront the fact that people are technically reproducible. Clearly nothing remains of Twilight. Mind gone, body gone, cutie mark (destiny?) gone, spark (magic? soul?) gone.
8754078 With the power of the Crystal Collar, you could also say "Turn into a perfect copy of Princess Celestia, mind and all." As demonstrated when Twilight transformed into an image in Big Mac's mind.
I wouldn't be surprised if you could also give a dead body life with it.
More to the point, if you smash the collar, Twilight's gone.
8754081 Not only that but they transformed into cows not just on a physical and mental level, but all the way down to the DNA (as demonstrated my the whole reproduction stuff). So yeah I think in this magical world it's best to assume the collar has no limitations to it
I find these conversations endlessly fascinating. It brings into question all sorts of things about 'what defines a person' and the whole 'transporter effect' - if you're reconstructed perfectly, are you the same you as before? It's good stuff to think about.
It makes me happy that people are still thinking about my story. I know I still am as well. Life has made things busy, but I do intend to work on this again soon.
9127078 I've rewritten the next chapter about three times so far, and I'm not happy with it yet. I need to work on it some more, but I've had a lot going on. I haven't forgotten about it. :)
Author, come back to us, please! Your faithful readers are calling! By the name of the Great Lords of Metal and BDSM! Awaken! Weave the web of thy words, entrap new readers and reinforce old readers' faith! AWAKEN!!!
9418297 The summoning ritual is complete! I have a rough outline of the next 3 chapters, and a couple ideas for the chapter after that, but I am having an issue with the secondary plot threads that I was intending on introducing in the next story. I haven't forgotten about it, and it weighs heavily on my mind.
“What have you done to me?” she screamed into her mind, trying to talk to the Collar. “You’ve ruined my horn! I don’t like where this is going. I demand that you leave me, right now.”
The voices inside her mind grew louder. “But Twilight, think of the power you could have. You can help your friends. You can do anything you want.”
Twilight disagreed with the voices. “No. You said you would go when I told you, so I am telling you now. Leave. Begone,” she said to them.
The voices simply said, “As you wish,” and then went silent. She was surprised at how easy it was to get rid of them. She wondered if she had made a mistake.
Oh, Twilight ... on one hand, I want to say too late, but ...
Well, this is unexpected. ANY of the collars can act as a host for the voice. ANY of the collars can act as a source of power for the voice. Seriously, as soon as you've put a collar on anyone else ...
It's a karma collar. A really nasty karma collar.
It's like the only safe thing to do is to say "Undo what has been done to my friend". Just "Leave" only results in the voices going to someone with even less awareness / resistance to the voices.
Worse, it seems that while the collar/voices can be moved, you can't get rid of that last one. So someone tried to hide it somewhere where it would not be found, and the princesses found out about it, and wanted it retrieved and destroyed. But instead of destroying it, Twilight's curiosity was a seed to investigate it, and then use it.
followed by a bright spark travelling from her Collar to Applejack’s. Her horn, now forgotten, ... The Collar was done working for people, it now craved only one thing: more power. The farm pony’s mind was broken with the power of the Collar, now infused with magic from an alicorn.
I didn't see a spark from Spike. Not enough magic in a baby dragon?
But, the power of honesty -- which includes the ability to tell a good lie -- and the power of an alicorn, now all in a "steal magic by collaring others" package?
This isn't Sombra; this is Tirek.
Now, one thing that I noticed, a flaw in the collar's plan: Both Twilight and Big Mac are still collared. So, they can actually be turned back, if needed.
This might be intentional. If something were to break it's control over Applejack, it has two backup options to go to. Twilight would be a bad choice -- she knows what's going on, and could probably take control with a well-worded command. Big Mac, on the other hand, would not -- but it's hard to see what he'd do with just "Eyop" or "nope".
But it's also a potential way out for them.
Now, reading the comments: Death of Personality is a real thing. Heck, Babylon 5 made it a fairly significant plot point over at least the first three years. At the very least we've seen suppression of personality, at least the equivalent of cryo-stasis. We don't yet know if they are gone for good, or just suppressed until restored. At the very least, we can go on the assumption of "good guys win in the end" -- it's a story after all -- and hold onto the assumption of temporary suppression.
I do like, from your comments, that you actually have plot plans, and this is not just random non-consensual TF's for the sake of it. So lets see some plots, ok?
Well that was an unexpected twist.
I like where this story is going, it's willing to jump controllers as needed, and keeps things fluid. Some more ponies with the instruction that the collar is good and should be obeyed, and even if one should fall, others would immediately take up the good work.
Well then....
Moar please.
Oh, this is shaping up to be a great story so fas, I Certainly didn't expect Twilight to be discarded by the magic of the coral much less be turned into a cow and have AJ take the lead from this point on. I love the idea of Twilight's horn becoming a dildo and that it was removed from her body; I wonder if we will see letter in the story. I can't wait to see what other shenanigans will come up next in Poniville, I hope we get to see more of the more obscure ponies in the series and all around Equestria. I hope you will do Flash Sentry and Sunburst, Thunderlane and Rumble would be great too.
Hadithi ilikuwa nzuri! Nilipenda maendeleo ya tabia na jinsi ulivyobadili kati ya matukio! Maelezo yako yalinifurahisha na natumaini kufanya vizuri! Hakikisha usiweke mchuzi katika kufulia!
I have just one thing to say about this story... ITS AWESOME
8445306
I appreciate it! And I am currently working on Chapter 4.
8447258 could i maybe suggest something that might add a little more spice if its good enough maybe you can use it
When is next chapter gonna be out?
8475800
I took a bit of a break due to sickness. I'm intending on working on it this week. I'll let everyone know, but it should be the next couple weeks.
8476602
Oh...
This story is really fantastic so far and I can see so much potential in this idea, really loving it and can't wait for more!
8517925
A lot of stuff came up, as I ended up taking over lead on a MUCK, but I'm still on it. Once I get things on track there, I will be back on this story. :) Thanks a lot!
Really hope we get chapter 4 soon. I really love this story
In contrast with the last guy to comment, I don't have issues with rape in my smut, only murder. And by my count, we went through 0 rapes and 3 murders, because if anyone tries to tell me Twilight Sparkle didn't die the moment her mind was melted, I'll laugh and back away.
8700704
Seeing as she can be turned back at any time I think saying she "died" is a bit strong since dead people can't be brought back
8753788
Yeah, that's my point, I don't think she can be turned back, not unless we're willing to confront the fact that people are technically reproducible. Clearly nothing remains of Twilight. Mind gone, body gone, cutie mark (destiny?) gone, spark (magic? soul?) gone.
8754074
All you need is a "turn back into your former self" type of command and it undoes it
8754078
With the power of the Crystal Collar, you could also say "Turn into a perfect copy of Princess Celestia, mind and all." As demonstrated when Twilight transformed into an image in Big Mac's mind.
I wouldn't be surprised if you could also give a dead body life with it.
More to the point, if you smash the collar, Twilight's gone.
8754081
Not only that but they transformed into cows not just on a physical and mental level, but all the way down to the DNA (as demonstrated my the whole reproduction stuff). So yeah I think in this magical world it's best to assume the collar has no limitations to it
I find these conversations endlessly fascinating. It brings into question all sorts of things about 'what defines a person' and the whole 'transporter effect' - if you're reconstructed perfectly, are you the same you as before? It's good stuff to think about.
It makes me happy that people are still thinking about my story. I know I still am as well. Life has made things busy, but I do intend to work on this again soon.
when can we expect the next chapter?
9127078
I've rewritten the next chapter about three times so far, and I'm not happy with it yet. I need to work on it some more, but I've had a lot going on. I haven't forgotten about it. :)
9127142
That's great to hear! I really love this story and I was sad to think it would never continue. Can't wait for the next update
I've been searching for this fanfiction for years and now, when I have finally found it, I must ask: when is the next chapter?
9369856
I wouldn't get my hopes up honestly
Author, come back to us, please! Your faithful readers are calling!
By the name of the Great Lords of Metal and BDSM! Awaken! Weave the web of thy words, entrap new readers and reinforce old readers' faith! AWAKEN!!!
9418297
The summoning ritual is complete!
I have a rough outline of the next 3 chapters, and a couple ideas for the chapter after that, but I am having an issue with the secondary plot threads that I was intending on introducing in the next story. I haven't forgotten about it, and it weighs heavily on my mind.
9419842
If you want some help, ask freely, I'd gladly assist! My PM is always open.
THIS CAN'T DIE!
Oh, Twilight ... on one hand, I want to say too late, but ...
Well, this is unexpected. ANY of the collars can act as a host for the voice. ANY of the collars can act as a source of power for the voice. Seriously, as soon as you've put a collar on anyone else ...
It's a karma collar. A really nasty karma collar.
It's like the only safe thing to do is to say "Undo what has been done to my friend". Just "Leave" only results in the voices going to someone with even less awareness / resistance to the voices.
Worse, it seems that while the collar/voices can be moved, you can't get rid of that last one. So someone tried to hide it somewhere where it would not be found, and the princesses found out about it, and wanted it retrieved and destroyed. But instead of destroying it, Twilight's curiosity was a seed to investigate it, and then use it.
I didn't see a spark from Spike. Not enough magic in a baby dragon?
But, the power of honesty -- which includes the ability to tell a good lie -- and the power of an alicorn, now all in a "steal magic by collaring others" package?
This isn't Sombra; this is Tirek.
Now, one thing that I noticed, a flaw in the collar's plan: Both Twilight and Big Mac are still collared. So, they can actually be turned back, if needed.
This might be intentional. If something were to break it's control over Applejack, it has two backup options to go to. Twilight would be a bad choice -- she knows what's going on, and could probably take control with a well-worded command. Big Mac, on the other hand, would not -- but it's hard to see what he'd do with just "Eyop" or "nope".
But it's also a potential way out for them.
Now, reading the comments: Death of Personality is a real thing. Heck, Babylon 5 made it a fairly significant plot point over at least the first three years. At the very least we've seen suppression of personality, at least the equivalent of cryo-stasis. We don't yet know if they are gone for good, or just suppressed until restored. At the very least, we can go on the assumption of "good guys win in the end" -- it's a story after all -- and hold onto the assumption of temporary suppression.
I do like, from your comments, that you actually have plot plans, and this is not just random non-consensual TF's for the sake of it. So lets see some plots, ok?
... err, I mean, lets see some story arcs.
aw man is spike trapped as a winoa?
Is this still being worked on?
10949689
I'd like to come back to it, but I have had a lot of setbacks in the last year.