I hate it wen there is no reaction from a human being talked to by a alien cartoon pony. If an alien cartoon pony would talk to a normal human who is not a full blow bronie he would totally freak the fuck out.

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To be fair, if you to laid there literally twisted and mangled A.) you would think that the alien ponies where a dream, and B.) be thankful for their help that you don't care what they are. However, I do see why that would make some people angry but their is a reason he didn't freak out.

I plan to reveal why in chapter 4 of Siren Wars (the sequel I'm currently writing.

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Have no fear, any vague points or oddities like not freaking out when seeing ponies, and other things is intentional, after all this is book 1 of 4 so I kindly implore you to wait until story 2 is out and then give the constructive criticism you gave me.

Alright, I read what you said below but reguardless there are some major flaws in this chapter (the kind that make someone want to stop reading). That being said, I'll hold on my constructive criticism - even if it could help. I just hope this guy has some serious flashbacks.

Also, to your comment, not true. If I was battered and broken, in a strange place, without knowing how or why I was there. I would assume the alien in front of me did this and lash out - out of fear - and I'm a pacifist, but, fear and pain is a hell of a drug. Your Neurons would be firing on all eight cylinders, each one saying, survive at all costs. Or I would think I was hallucinating, and still be afraid / lashing out.

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Don't worry again the lack of reaction and all that is intentional because please remember that this is only part 1 in a 4 part series. The "flaws" are purposely put their so people will read the other parts in hopes that things will make sense. Keep in mind as well this is an Alternate Equestria that's the result of the Season 5 Finale and Starlight altering the time lines.

So serious flashbacks will be happening including one whole chapter dedicated to Sean. But that won't be until book 3 because book 1 & 2 build the timeline up.

However I appreciate constructive criticism so long as it's delivered maturely and positively instead of "Your shit sucks and here's why" i would criticism along the lines of "hey here some tips and some things I think you should change so the writing becomes better.