Trixie unexpectedly visits Luna, who must scramble to accomodate her. The visit is special, so Luna wants to get it just right. Getting a visitor on the moon is rare after all.
Interesting story! Makes me wonder how it'll go; I could easily see Trixie's mind being broken or even going insane from all this. Not sure it's that kind of story, though. Maybe a happy ending? Maybe not? We'll see!
Heeeeey, I put off reviewing this chapter cuz I kept thinking there would be a better time to sit down and type, but nothing came up and you put out another chapter so this is what you get.
I've noticed that with these last couple chapters (basically since your hiatus) that you've pulled back a little from your original loosy-goosy feeling of writing that you had said you originally planned for this story...but you didn't shy away from some very lewd content! I hope that your experiment is going well.
Hmm... I don't want to seem like a pervert, so I'll refrain from getting too analytical of your smut, but since (if I'm remembering right) it was a part of your goal to try it I'll say I thought it was interesting. Your descriptions were dynamic and there was some good internal back and forth. You did well at capturing Trixie getting caught up in the moment. The scene was interesting, a little novel and plenty lewd. I will say that a few times now give described Luna as beautiful, though, but not talked through Trixie's attraction,what it is that draws her to the Alicorn. Of course I'm not too sure of how to describe the beauty of ponies to one another... But I suppose that's your job!
Beyond that MAN is Luna a thirsty mare. If she really plans to keep Trixie forever I how she doesn't get too bored... And equally interesting is the thought that some long term prisoners have trouble adjusting back to the outside. I fear for Luna and everyone else if she ends up pursuing her idle desires so fervently back on Equis proper!
Also, if it means anything I do kinda side with Trixie in her argument since. I think if it's Harmony's goal to rehabilitate then it's gone too far. If the goal is to punish... I don't know the details but it might have gone too far. This seems cruel and unusual.
Thanks for the chapter!! Good to see you uploading again.
Oh boy, Trixie ain't gonna be happy to find out about her extended stay...
Great chapter!
I'm so happy with this new chapter ^^
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I mean, Luna did inform as to the consequences, just not to why she really wanted to update the link.
Gotta say, I'm glad that this popped up in the feature box. Wouldn't have found the story at all otherwise.
Interesting story! Makes me wonder how it'll go; I could easily see Trixie's mind being broken or even going insane from all this. Not sure it's that kind of story, though. Maybe a happy ending? Maybe not? We'll see!
It's alive. ALIVE!
Heeeeey, I put off reviewing this chapter cuz I kept thinking there would be a better time to sit down and type, but nothing came up and you put out another chapter so this is what you get.
I've noticed that with these last couple chapters (basically since your hiatus) that you've pulled back a little from your original loosy-goosy feeling of writing that you had said you originally planned for this story...but you didn't shy away from some very lewd content! I hope that your experiment is going well.
Hmm... I don't want to seem like a pervert, so I'll refrain from getting too analytical of your smut, but since (if I'm remembering right) it was a part of your goal to try it I'll say I thought it was interesting. Your descriptions were dynamic and there was some good internal back and forth. You did well at capturing Trixie getting caught up in the moment. The scene was interesting, a little novel and plenty lewd. I will say that a few times now give described Luna as beautiful, though, but not talked through Trixie's attraction,what it is that draws her to the Alicorn. Of course I'm not too sure of how to describe the beauty of ponies to one another... But I suppose that's your job!
Beyond that MAN is Luna a thirsty mare. If she really plans to keep Trixie forever I how she doesn't get too bored... And equally interesting is the thought that some long term prisoners have trouble adjusting back to the outside. I fear for Luna and everyone else if she ends up pursuing her idle desires so fervently back on Equis proper!
Also, if it means anything I do kinda side with Trixie in her argument since. I think if it's Harmony's goal to rehabilitate then it's gone too far. If the goal is to punish... I don't know the details but it might have gone too far. This seems cruel and unusual.
Thanks for the chapter!! Good to see you uploading again.