I don't know how you do it I don't know if it's just some kind of neat Talent you have been setting FanFiction on fire. I've been seeing people on YouTube reading your story people talking about it on Tumblr at one time I saw stories on the front page of fanfiction keep up the great work.
8037224 Thanks for noticing. Editing in Sunrise instead. Originally was gonna name him Midnight, but I got advice from someone saying that Sunrise makes a lot sense than Midnight
before I read this, I have to ask if it goes from rape to consent a some point. Sorry, I just have a thing about clop fics I like that start with rape but turn into willing and consensual. Till I hear from ya I'l put it in my read later list ^_^
8038985 Well, not sure who that was, but they were—if I may be frank—wrong. Without italics it is very difficult to tell whether he is thinking something or actually saying it out loud.
Not a bad start.Looking foreword to the real action.
I don't know how you do it I don't know if it's just some kind of neat Talent you have been setting FanFiction on fire. I've been seeing people on YouTube reading your story people talking about it on Tumblr at one time I saw stories on the front page of fanfiction keep up the great work.
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Tumblr mentions me? I never knew that and thank you. I do my best and I get quite some surprises along the way.
Not a bad start, looks nice. And i saw what you did there with the jerking part, anime fans are gonna have a laugh for sure, lol.
four times Sunrise is called Midnight
was that intentional or just a mistake
otherwise, nice start love to see more
Lmao. This is some golden shit right here.
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Thanks for noticing. Editing in Sunrise instead. Originally was gonna name him Midnight, but I got advice from someone saying that Sunrise makes a lot sense than Midnight
Great story so far, looking forward to more!
One note though, generally thoughts are placed in italics instead of "quotation marks" to visually distinguish them from normal speech.
Also, there is still at least one "Midnight" lurking in there.
(Feel free to pm for proofreading of future chapters if you wish!)
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Thanks for the italics thing, but I did that once and someone complained about it.
before I read this, I have to ask if it goes from rape to consent a some point. Sorry, I just have a thing about clop fics I like that start with rape but turn into willing and consensual. Till I hear from ya I'l put it in my read later list ^_^
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There will be a semi-rape scene in chapter two, but things will go better
8038985 Well, not sure who that was, but they were—if I may be frank—wrong. Without italics it is very difficult to tell whether he is thinking something or actually saying it out loud.
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Thank you. I'll make sure to do that when I'm writing my next clopfic
Did you really have to reference the end of evangelion?