Just before Nightmare moon is defeated, she casts one last spell. The effects on the Mane 6 are... different to say the very least. How will this change affect their lives? Read and find out!
I would recommend a proofreader my friend, there are several glaring spelling and grammatical errors in such a short chapter. You have a great premise and story flow but with so many glaring errors it could turn away serious readers, and frankly this deserves better than that.
As such, I believe that your alias should be Alexandria, which means Defender..” “For thee, We believe the alias... Valeria. Would fit nicely. It means Defender.”
Now, the Brujah of old followed the Olympian Ideal (also known as Entelechy). This means that they believ'd in perfection of body and mind, and so trained both relentlessly. They also believed strongly in family mentality. If thou did'st mess with one of the family of a Brujah, thou would'st face the wrath of all of them.”
It'd be interesting if she had said clan's blood before her transformation but was diluted thanks to time.
Next Luna turned to Rainbow Dash. “Loyal maiden Dash, thou hast the bloodlines of the Toreador primarily and the Lasombra secondarily, yes? Thy powers will be very similar to Applejack's, save for the added benefit of Domination and control over the very shadows, known as Obtenebration.”
“If it came to it, I'd definitely go with Twilight's decision. I can tell that this is not the kind of power to be playing pranks with.” Rainbow stated, earning a proud smile from the lavender mare.
I dunno my OCbefore his transformation and later ascension used his power of shadows to play pranks/ troll and still does it even afterwords even though frequency has dropped a lot to the point he never does it.
nice work
I would recommend a proofreader my friend, there are several glaring spelling and grammatical errors in such a short chapter. You have a great premise and story flow but with so many glaring errors it could turn away serious readers, and frankly this deserves better than that.
8072652 I was going to change the i's to I's but i forgot. Hold on....
You've given Defender twice as an alias.
8095242 My mistake.Let me fix that error. Valeria actually means Strength.
fix'd.
i'm not sure where this will go but i want to follow its trail
8478886 i'm hoping i come up with more sometime soon. These flashes of inspiration are just KILLING me, here!
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maybe instead of goind episode by episode you can skip a couple and maybe have vamponies be natural enemies to changlings
8478891 i'll consider that.
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okay i look forward to reading more of the story
8478922 Knock on wood; i look forward to it too.
More please!!
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Sorry to disappoint, but this is a story that progresses as i receive inspiration. It doesn't happen a lot, unfortunately.
It'd be interesting if she had said clan's blood before her transformation but was diluted thanks to time.
I dunno my OC before his transformation and later ascension used his power of shadows to play pranks/ troll and still does it even afterwords even though frequency has dropped a lot to the point he never does it.