There are several problems with this story.

The pacing of this story/chapter was quick.

It feels like a dragon version of fall of equestria.

No details on location, despite being in ponyville.

Spike mother being a part of the story which personal I really don't mind but readers will most likely ask why she gave her egg to Celestia? Also Unless it will be explained in future chapters it hurt the story overall.

Adding Chrysalis to me is a easy way out cause she can change into anything she wants. What you should of had done was made her spy on Twilight and or Starlight. And when the moment was right change into one of the princess take a few guards to smash the eggs and kill a few of the dragon mothers.

Spike should of had rape the princesses since (and it up to you) he been with and or near them his entire life. Twilight being first follow by Celestia, then a Candance if she's caught, follow by Luna.

I won't get to you on grammar since I'm on a phone and it not one of my strongest points.

The idea is interesting but the presentation kind of ruined it.

With that said keep writing.

The story was rush.
But I like the concept of a Dragon version of Fall of equstria and it make more sens then caribou take over.
but I believe this story can be great, you just need someone to look over your work and help you edit it.

7866035 Thank you for the feedback and great advice. I'm sorry but I do have one question What is Fall of Equestria? I've never come across that one. I mean I have come across Fallout Equestria which is one of my favourite stories but you and Henrik have both said my story is the dragon version with Caribou being replaced by dragons.

Still I also have to tackle two points you raised which I want to answer.

Spike's Mother, the "betrayal" of the ponies came many years before Spike's egg is given to Celestia and so Spike's mother would have no reason to hate the ponies.

As for the princess "Sex" idea, in the conquest they are the property of Ember so I'm not ruling out that they will be used to create more dragons since Spike is marrying Ember. However I don't know if that's the best idea.

7866441 I'm sorry I've already asked Crisis Nova this but what is Fall of Equestria? I actually had to google Caribou because I thought they were made up. To be clear I based this story off a nightmare I had two weeks ago. However your feedback is very valuable, I do need a editor if I'm honest but I have no idea where or who is ask.

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Fall of Equestria is AU where equestrian gets concurred by the Caribou a race that believe in male supreme and that all females are just for breeding and sexual favors.

7866536 Ah! Okay thank you. Still that sounds silly if you don't mind me saying. Okay so my story is very similar? Well I suppose that goes back to the whole there isn't a new idea under the sun.

please continue

7869037 I'll think about it. I'm not promising at this time.

7869039 OK

i hope you continue this

7928529 As I said before I'm thinking about it