John Williams with his team and a handful of scientists is sent to a planet to investigate a claim that the planet has life,come with us to see if its true
A bit rushed. I recommend you flesh out conversations with actual diologue instead of 'they talked for a while'. Also put a bit more detail into this. Good job though
ye know, if they were entering a new plant, they wouldn't know if there was even food, water, resources, etc., so why didn't they bring that kind of stuff in the first place? and it sound kinda weird that the majority of them are private ranked, this seems like a situation that would require elite forces, not new forces
A bit rushed. I recommend you flesh out conversations with actual diologue instead of 'they talked for a while'. Also put a bit more detail into this. Good job though
ye know, if they were entering a new plant, they wouldn't know if there was even food, water, resources, etc., so why didn't they bring that kind of stuff in the first place? and it sound kinda weird that the majority of them are private ranked, this seems like a situation that would require elite forces, not new forces
Applejack: "Wait you can talk"
John: "Wait, you can talk"
lol