Much better cleaned up. Not that I didn't enjoy it before, but the typos were distracting.

7781584 Haha, I don't blame you, I was cringing when I reread it myself! Needless to say I am FAR happier with this version

Thanks!

I look forward to more.

7787565 Thanks! Hope it will live up!

That's why you ALWAYS have a pair of medical grade shears close to hand when indulging in BDSM.

7790125 Yup, I think these two need to do a bit more research in the future

7790300 Although, and to your credit, you showed an example of first-timers getting it slightly wrong and consequences for which I applaud you.

Too many times on here I read BDSM fics where the characters 'try it out' and are instantly experts.

7790925 Thanks! That's what I was going for! I wanted to show how they learn and grow in the future, but I don't wanna risk spoilers by saying more

7791476 Well you have a definite follow here! Would it be cool if I pm'd you if I have any questions about your story?

7791481 Sure, go ahead

That was pretty hot. Fluttershy being the sub was a bit too predictable though.

This is a really good story. Not only was it written extremely well, it also showed a good example of how bondage can go wrong if you go to fast without knowing what you're doing. Well done.