300 years ago, humanity wiped itself out, leaving behind a single nano-enhanced soldier. Suicidal, dangerous and no longer human, he ends up in Equestria, just when something big is about to go down - can one freaky guy, make a difference?
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Interesting thus far.
why did i not think of that
Finally, I arrived at my destination - the 'Tesla Labs'. The huge round bunker, housed a prototype piece of technology powerful enough to manipulate matter at quantum level - if my calculations were correct, it should have been capable of converting my body to pure energy - nano tech or not, it was doubtful anything can survive that.
Little edgy and possibly OP so far.
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Yeah, the story is a little dark and edgy and I need to put it through Grammarly one day. Sorry about that, I know it’s not that great, but in my defense, it was the first thing I ever wrote, so…
If by OP you meant that the OC is overpowered, then no, not really. He may seem like that at first, but while powerful, he can still get his ass kicked (which, will happen in the later chapters)
First chapter's a little rough around the edges mechanically. You should be using em dashes ( — alt+0151) instead of the hyphen-minus for asides—like this one, for example—and you have a few comma splices or other mistakes.
It seems like you use a lot of ellipsis when what you really want is a period. Just some food for thought.
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Yeah, I know. That's a weird habit of mine, I'm trying to fight it, but I tend to overuse ellipsis even in the newer stories
Unfortunately, over usage of ellipses is the least of this story problems. I'm planning a full rewrite in the near future, after I finish the one I'm working on right now.
Post-rewrite here. It turned out pretty good.
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Um... This is still the original version - the rewrite is ongoing (albeit much slower than I planned )