When a hero's true colors are shown, the ones who are there for you will do anything for vengeance.
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for fuck's sake how many of these "I LOVE YOOOOOOoooooooOOOOOU AAAAaaNNDD HERE'S A POWER BALLAD TOOoooOOOOO PROOOVE ITTTTTT" "I LOVE YOU TOO NOW LET'S MAKE IT A DUEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEEET BEEEEECAUUUUUUSE I LOOOOOOOOOOVE YOOUUUUUUUUUuuuuuUUUUUUU" "OH FUCK SOARIN" "HE'S A THREAT" "WONDERBOLTS EVERYWHERE" "HE'S GONE" "NO WAIT HE'S BACK WITH THE WONDERBOLTS" rinse and repeat scenes can you possibly make
again, for future reference - tone down the cheese, overdramatics and OOC-ness - now this is just a nitpick but a moral nitpick. but there's no fucking way you would just flat out murder someone instantly just because they don't see things your way, you'd at least try and reason with them, find that notch to get them to understand but that's just my opinion
I'm sorry to say, but this is starting to sound like a bad anime. The pacing is to quick, the drama and romance is overshadowing the already nonexistent detail, and the character development is just out the window. Now I know that you want this to be even better than the prequel, which I for one enjoyed, but you have made it nearly unreadable to the more experience on this site. All I am saying is this: slow it down, add more detail, learn a bit more of the characters personalities, and cut back on the drama/romance.
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It's nice to see your comments again after so many chapters. You don't think that the pacing in these chapters has been too fast or the details are too much, do you?
"Oh, you think you're being cute?"
"Bitch we're adorable," Rainbow and Indominus said together.
DBZ Abridged lol'ed